According to the reading passage, it is stated that storing patients' medical records in electronic database is more beneficial than maintaining them in traditional paper-based way, and it provides the reasons to strengthen this issue. However, the professor in the listening states, why the assumptions mentioned in the reading passage were not correct and refutes them by describing three reasons as follows.
Firstly, the reading claims that by storing records in an electronic database, the need for significant amount of storage and problems of doctors' access will be reduced; therefore, it will cost less to copy or trasfer records from one location to another. The professor casts doubt on this point by saying that doctors will still need to keep paper records of their patients for emergency back-up. She mentions that because of this fact there will not be any cost savings related to record storage.
Secondly, the article posits that electronic records have the advantage of preventing possibility of human errors, because it is associated with a standard and readable font. In contrast, the professor says that doctors must still use a pen and paper to record their patient's information while examining them. As a result, the interpreter who enters the information written by the doctor into the electronic system may make errors while reading doctor's handwriting.
Finally, the reading says that electronic databases provide an aiding research which means they can store thousands of information that could be accessed from any research location. The professor opposes this point by explaining that unlike what is mentioned in the reading there are strict privacy rules related to recording patients' information; hence, a patient can block others access to their medical record if they wish to. That's why this claim can't be a merit for electronic database approach.
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...ost savings related to record storage. Secondly, the article posits that electr...
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...o their medical record if they wish to. Thats why this claim cant be a merit for elec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 297.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3367003367 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70567999522 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558922558923 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1351674514 49.2860985944 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.090909091 110.228320801 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 21.698381199 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5454545455 7.06452816374 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295589571316 0.272083759551 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112530900302 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718128241494 0.0662205650399 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181625749631 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214723258818 0.0443174109184 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.3589403974 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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