As the development of high-advanced technology and multiple transportation, it’s easier for people to leave their hometown and work in another country. However, some freshly graduated students still prefer to work in their hometowns for different reasons. In my own opinion, working in my grown area is a better choice.
Obviously, people have already better-established their social network in their hometown than outside, which will be a good starting point for their career. The advice and assistance from their friends, relatives or neighbors will be important for a freshman to better tackle with kinds of difficulties arose in their first job. For example, when I firstly got a chance to introduce a product to an important customer in my first job, I was so nervous because of my less experience. I immediately come to the house of my older cousin and seek advice from him, who has been a product manager for around 3 years. Luckily, with his sharing experience and advice, the customer was very satisfactory with my presentation and placed the order without any hesitance.
Besides, students could save more money if they live in their hometown. For fresh graduates without high salaries, living with their parents could definitely reduce their daily expenditure like house renting fees. For example, my older sister has lived in the home place with her parents for around 3 years since her college graduation. She need not afford much money for renting a studio or share a 2-room house with another 3-4 students with crowded living area but less money. On the contrary, she saved lots of money and started to afford her first house this summer.
Last but not least, living in hometown means much more family time. People enjoying family time would prefer to stay around their parents in their hometown. For example, I have lived in my home place since my college graduation and I enjoy the barbecue time with my parents every weekend. We shared what we saw and what we heard with each other and also the fabulous roast meat, which would not be possible if I lived another country.
Overall, I think living in the hometown is a better choice for the fresh graduates. Living in the hometown does not necessarily correlate with less opportunity or boring life, but might offer a better starting career point, save more money and bring with more family time. All of the above could make the freshman much prepared for their future challenge.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Sometimes people think nowadays the media (TV, newspaper, Internet) are less concerned about the accuracy of news than in the past, and the incorrect information may cause more problem to the public. 83
- Sample TOEFL essay: After they complete their university studies, some students live in their hometowns. Others live in different towns and cities. Which do you think is beterr? Give reasons for your answer. 76
- Sample TOEFL essay: After they complete their university studies, some students live in their hometowns. Others live in different towns and cities. Which do you think is beterr? Give reasons for your answer. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 274, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
... money and bring with more family time. All of the above could make the freshman much prep...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, for example, i think, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 22.412803532 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1373.03311258 150% => OK
No of words: 412.0 270.72406181 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9854368932 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59508588151 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 145.348785872 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516990291262 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 419.366225166 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6065567897 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.7 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 4.33554083885 369% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212270359633 0.272083759551 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802463342467 0.0996497079465 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584530282993 0.0662205650399 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131561596702 0.162205337803 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214070760787 0.0443174109184 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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