Some companies in the United States have developed quot wellness quot programs that give rewards or incentives to employees for achieving certain health related goals such as stopping smoking or losing weight The rewards and incentives include cash pr

In this reading, the author declares three benefits of a strategy used in companies that give rewards or incentives to employees for achieving health-related goals. However, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on all of them.

First of all, according to the passage, the author argues that awards and incentives provide motivation for people to stay healthy by quoting two surveys. Nevertheless, the lecture refutes that this kind of motivation will not last for long time. He points out in a similar study, which lasted for a longer period, the people motivated by awards and incentives to keep healthy went back to the previous lifestyle after two years. That is to say, people who quitted smoke started to smoke again and people who lose weight gained the weight back.

Second, the professor disagrees with the fairness resulted from awards and incentives supported by the author. He claims that healthy status depends on many factors. For one thing, people are busy for taking care of their parents and children may not have enough time to do exercise. For another, people own different ability to stay heathy. For example, overweight issue might springs from genetic aspects, which may not be controlled by healthy life style. Thus, it is unfair to those people to pay more health insurance than others.

Finally, while the author presents that this method could save money for companies in the long term, the professor doubts that by saying it is unclear to save money. He says that the target of this program may take years to achieve, however, the employees usually will not stay in a company that long. Therefore, it may not be financially beneficial to company, because employees would leave and work in other companies.

To sum up, the author shows us three reasons in favor of the incentive program, which contradicts the main ideas of the professor in the lecture.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, kind of, first of all, for one thing, to sum up, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 316.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89240506329 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.403897119 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 145.348785872 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537974683544 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 13.0662251656 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 316.0 21.2450331126 1487% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.2860985944 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1546.0 110.228320801 1403% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 316.0 21.698381199 1456% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 160.0 7.06452816374 2265% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211218560451 0.272083759551 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.211218560451 0.0996497079465 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117165911801 0.162205337803 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051145464307 0.0443174109184 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 159.6 13.3589403974 1195% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -240.8 53.8541721854 -447% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 5.55761589404 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 125.3 11.0289183223 1136% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.56 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 22.66 8.42419426049 269% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 10.7273730684 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 128.4 10.498013245 1223% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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