TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism

Both the passage and the lecturer offer opposing views on the altruism. While the text explains altruism as a selfless act, the professor gives contrary views on it.

First, the reading mentions that meerkats acts as standing guard in order to protect its group from the predators while other members gather food and eat it. Additionally, the guard meerkat makes crying sound to alert other members so that they can run to some safe place. In the contrary the lecturer states that before going for the guard duty meerkat eats well and thus, it's stomach is full in case attacked by the predator. Moreover, the professor explains that the guard meerkat can save itself more likely as it can hide in the nearby burrow on the other hand, the meerkats who are searching food are in grave danger to become prey of the predtaor.

Second, the article posits that human also do selfless acts such as donating their organ to the relatives and sometimes to the stranger. The speaker refutes this by saying that a person who is donating his kidney gets appreciation and laud from the stranger as well as from the society. This enhances the donar's self respect and these non materialistic rewards are very precious to the people doing altruism.

Clearly, the disparity exists between reading and listening, the lecturer gives more substantial points as compared to the article. Thus, the reading passage fails to justify its claim.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, while, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1187.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 241.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92531120332 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36350674847 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576763485477 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 351.0 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6991781683 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.909090909 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72727272727 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0475822508102 0.272083759551 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0239060533944 0.0996497079465 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039676858754 0.0662205650399 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0392801588144 0.162205337803 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493597830637 0.0443174109184 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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