TOEFL TPO 24 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the listening passages are both about leg bone of Tyrannosaurus rex (T.rex). While the reading article mentions that researchers reveal that some materials seem to be remain of blood vessels, red blood cells, and collagen, the professor casts doubt on this founding by saying this information is skeptical.

The article of the reading claims that there is a soft, flexible organic substance in hollows in the bones that represent the remnants of red blood cells. Moreover, it is mentioned that because red blood cells are in vessels inside bones, so it is most likely the actual blood of T.rex. The professor, however, contends that this soft tissue could be lifted from bacteria (moist residue). Also, bacteria colonize hollows, so it is probably this organic matter is from it.

In addition, the writer states that with examination the researchers found the presence of spheres that could be red blood cells. The lecture, on the other hand, says there some places the researcher found another animal that have the same sphere. So, It could be a different reddish mineral.

Finally, the reading adds that there is collagen which is associated with bone tissue. The professor refutes this point by saying we can find collagen in a different part of the body such as skin. Therefore, the collagen is probably from researches’ skin. Also, there is information that collagen does not stay more than 100,000 years, so it is fresh which suggests that this is not from T. rex.

All in all, the lecturer debunks all the three points in the reading.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in addition, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 262.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00381679389 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53667521967 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545801526718 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 381.6 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4416609106 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6428571429 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 7.06452816374 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397579982706 0.272083759551 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12784964187 0.0996497079465 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882359246539 0.0662205650399 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19372045132 0.162205337803 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111857332356 0.0443174109184 252% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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