TPO 03 Integrated toefl writing
Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rembrandt because of its style, and indeed the representation of the woman’s face is very much like that of portraits known to be by Rembrandt. But there are problems with the painting that suggest it could not be a work by Rembrandt. First, there is something inconsistent about the way the woman inthe portrait is dressed. She is wearing a white linen cap of a kind that only servants would wear-yet the coat she is wearing has a luxurious fur collar that no servant could afford. Rembrandt, who was known for his attention to the details of his subjects’ clothing, would not have been guilty of such an inconsistency.
Second, Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow, but in this painting these elements do not fit together. The face appears to be illuminated by light reflected onto it from below. But below the face is the dark fur collar, which would absorb light rather than reflect it. So the face should appear partially in shadow-which is not how it appears. Rembrandt would never have made such an error.
Finally, examination of the back of the painting reveals that it was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together. Although Rembrandt often painted on wood panels, no painting known to be by Rembrandt uses a panel glued together in this way from several pieces of wood. For these reasons the painting was removed from the official catalog of Rembrandt’s paintings in the 1930s.
The reading passage and the lecture discuss about the well-known artist of seventeenth-century Rembrandt, and casts doubt on his one of the painting. Both argue that whether the painting is made by Rembrandt or not. The article states that the painting is not made by Rembrandt, and provides three clues for the support. However, the professor believes that the painting belongs to Rembrandt only.
Firstly, the article states that the woman is wearing a fur coat and a hat which are inconsistent with the complete painting. Since she is apparently a servant by looking at her hat. The professor argues to this point that the original painting was recolored by another painter in order to make it look like an aristocratic lady and to increase its price of the portrait.
Secondly, the article claims that while Rembrandt was expert and mastered the light and shadow elements in the painting, this picture actually consists of many errors. This point was challenged by the professor, she says that illumination of light on woman’s face was correct, but after adding colors to the original painting it was mistaken. Further, she puts her point stating that in the original painting, the woman is wearing light colored dress which reflects the light on her face. Thus, there is consistency between woman’s dress and produces realistic shadows.
Finally, the passage posit that the back panel used for painting was made of several pieces of wood which then glued together and this is quiet unusual in the Rembrandt’s paintings. Notwithstanding, the lecture rebuts this point, and states that the painting was made on the single piece of the wood similar to his other paintings and pieces of wood was added later in order to make it a grand painting. Also, professor says that the wood used to enlarge the panel is identical to the same tree wood as used by Rembrandt. Thus, from professor’s explanations we ensures that the painting was made by Rembrandt.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nconsistent with the complete painting. Since she is apparently a servant by looking ...
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Line 7, column 572, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'ensure'
Suggestion: ensure
..., from professor's explanations we ensures that the painting was made by Rembrandt...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, finally, first, firstly, however, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 327.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06727828746 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84019009214 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495412844037 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0518999519 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.466666667 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470244124203 0.272083759551 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170552394636 0.0996497079465 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869519891077 0.0662205650399 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287101354499 0.162205337803 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991177324636 0.0443174109184 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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