TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b

The reading passage discuss three reasons that that is affecting birds population and thus resulting in their decline. However, the professor in the follow up material cast doubts on these points by providing the evidences and justifications.

First, the passage tells that increased human population requires more space to build homes, offices and malls. This in turn leads to decrease in the bird’s natural habitat, making them homeless and thus causing decrease in their population. This is contraindicated by the professor, he says that in reality birds including hawks and pigeons have more and better space to live which is why their population in cities in increasing tremendously.

Second, the reading says that the increased area for agriculture is also responsible for decline in bird’s population. Conversely, the lecturer refutes this point and explains that now less land is being used for agriculture as compared to the past. This is because of the development of new crops that needs less land, it indeed produce more food per unit area as compared to the old crops in the past.

Third, the author points at the lethal side effects of the pesticides and claims it to be one of the reasons for decreasing population of the birds. However, this is questioned by the speaker. He reveals that now two major changes have been brought in the field of agriculture. One is the development and use of new pesticides that are less toxic and second is the development of new pest resistant crop which reduce the need of pesticides. Therefore, with these two developments bird’s will not be harmed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...heir decline. However, the professor in the follow up material cast doubts on these points...
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Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eality birds including hawks and pigeons have more and better space to live which...
^^
Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'produces'?
Suggestion: produces
...w crops that needs less land, it indeed produce more food per unit area as compared to ...
^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'conversely', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'thus']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.26821192053 0.261695866417 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.158940397351 0.158904122519 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0761589403974 0.0723426182421 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0397350993377 0.0435111971325 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0264900662252 0.0277247811725 96% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129139072848 0.128828473217 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0562913907285 0.0370669169778 152% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.86066265188 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0198675496689 0.0208969081088 95% => OK
Particles: 0.00331125827815 0.00154638098197 214% => OK
Determiners: 0.105960264901 0.128158765124 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00331125827815 0.0158828679856 21% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0198675496689 0.0114777025283 173% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1627.0 1645.83664459 99% => OK
No of words: 266.0 271.125827815 98% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11654135338 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.345864661654 0.374372842146 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.278195488722 0.287516216867 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.195488721805 0.187439937562 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142857142857 0.113142543107 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86066265188 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537593984962 0.539623497131 100% => OK
Word variations: 52.9728707945 53.8517498576 98% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0529801325 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4615384615 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4220074902 49.3711431718 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.153846154 132.220823453 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.769230769231 0.878197800319 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 48.2810873337 50.5018328374 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.01470588235 1.90840788429 106% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.597253668437 0.549887131256 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.131155724842 0.142949733639 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0959199229304 0.0787303798458 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.602890627543 0.631733273073 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.178281709353 0.139662658121 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.26278554414 0.266732575781 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880020494324 0.103435571967 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.408068749769 0.414875509568 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.071611499414 0.0530846634433 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.419039444338 0.40443939384 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476416276961 0.0528353158467 90% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.26048565121 141% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.62251655629 28% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.1766004415 126% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.2958057395 87% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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