TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The reading passage states that the new tactic of advertising companies should be banned because it may give incorrect information to the consumers, harmful for costumers financially and it breaks the social interaction. However, the lecturer who is a buzzer cast doubts each idea of the author.

First and foremost, the article suggests that the buzzers may give a wrong idea about the buzzing product to the people. On the other hand, the lecturer rejects this by saying that companies pay for the people to tell the truth. Moreover, he said that companies hire people who experienced their product and have a great impression about it and this is the reason why he buzzes his phone service.

Secondly, the passage indicates that people may accept the claim of the buzzed because they do not know he or she is lobbied. In contrast, the lecturer made a counterclaim to this idea by saying that people even ask many questions about the product such as how many years did you use it and if the buzzers could not answer such question, the consumer will probably not buy the product.

Finally, the reading claims that fake commercial of buzzers breaks the social relationship because people become less trustful of people. Nonetheless, the lecturer argued that if the product of the company is not good enough, then they could not get buzzers which increases the belief of people on buzzers. Moreover, he concluded that it will make people more trustful because the buzzers are more experienced than the consumers.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, in contrast, such as, on the other hand, to tell the truth

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 30.3222958057 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1266.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 255.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96470588235 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54163031532 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537254901961 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4374865912 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.6 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.3 7.06452816374 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368376628035 0.272083759551 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138395367747 0.0996497079465 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586349559355 0.0662205650399 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216065330067 0.162205337803 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051424210072 0.0443174109184 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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