tpo 24
The reading discussion is about the finding of the remnant of the animals' actual tissues which live about 70-million- years ago, and it represets three reasons. However, the professor reject all of the reasons because they are not sure about them
First, the passage tells that the exitence of many small branching channels inside the bone can be the explanation for the hollow inside the bones where the blood vessels were once located. Also, they found a soft, flexible organic materials inside the channel which can be the remnant of the actual blood vessels. However, the lecturer decline this claim, becuase after the organism died, the bacteria located in the hollows inside the bones. So, this soft materials can be the trace of the bacterias colonies inside the bones.
Second, the text provide an evidence of the existance of the sphere that could be the leftover of the red blood cells. In fact, the spehere contain of the iron which is a crucial material in transporting the oxygen to tissue. Nevertheless, the professor does not accept this reason, becuase they found the sphere inside the others bones fossils of animals which had not a red blood vesesels. So, the sphere can be the reddish materials not more.
Finally, the reading passage indicate that the dinosaur's leg bone consist of the collagen. The collagen is a fibrous protein which is a chief component of living bone tissue, in which it forms a so-called collagen matrix. Whereas, in the listening section this claim is rejected. Until now, the collogen just find in the animals body who live in 100,000 years ago, not more. So, it is not reasonable that the collogen that have found in the animals body who died about 70 million yers ago be the remains of the blood cells. The possible explanatio is that the collagen can be trace of the researchers' skin who carry the bones, because the humans's skin has a collogen.
- Tpo 9. Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.I completely disagree with this claim that nowadays children are less creative than they were in the past. Here you can see my reasons. 73
- Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. 83
- tpo 23 73
- tpo6 3
- People learn easily from the friends beside them. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... reasons. However, the professor reject all of the reasons because they are not sure about...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 222, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...h it forms a so-called collagen matrix. Whereas, in the listening section this claim is...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, nevertheless, second, so, whereas, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 325.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83384615385 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36833149767 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489230769231 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 484.2 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0249512787 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.733333333 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422055331884 0.272083759551 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136792944706 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727007726429 0.0662205650399 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23640880809 0.162205337803 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853611641995 0.0443174109184 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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