TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The reading and the lecture discuss a discovery about the remains of Tyrannosaurus rex which existed 70 million years ago. The author believes that this fossil could still contain tissues of the animal which have never been found because they have been replaced by minerals. The professor brings into question the claims made in the article. He considers that it is doubtful that this fossil tissue’s remains could still survive.

First, the author comes up with the idea that the branching channels inside the fossil are likely to be a blood vessels compartments and that the soft substances which were found there may be the remains of the blood vessels. However, the professor argues that these substances could not necessarily be blood vessel’s remains because a kind of bacteria has been seen inside of empty areas in others ancient fossils. So, it might be just the moisture residue that bacteria left.

Second, the author states that the presence of spheres could be a great proof of the red blood cells’ remains, it is mentioned that iron material was contained inside the spheres which were a vital material to transport the oxygen to tissues. The lecturer rebuts this argument by pointing out that there have been ancient animals with identical spheres, but they, in their past lives, did not have red blood cells, therefore, the material remained in the sphere could be just reddish mineral.

Finally, the author contends that it was proved that the dinosaur leg bone contained collagen, which is always accompanying the bone tissue. The professor, on the other hand, posits that the collagen that has been found in other animals has been just from around 100 years ago, so it is not accurate to say that the collagen of this fossil has lasted for 70 million years. He thinks that the collagen drops from the researches’ skin because the skin, actually, contains lots of collagen.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 276, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...se they have been replaced by minerals. The professor brings into question the clai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, may, second, so, still, therefore, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 10.4613686534 201% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 12.0772626932 174% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 318.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04716981132 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49968353679 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525157232704 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.2916011942 49.2860985944 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.75 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 21.698381199 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 7.06452816374 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45095477271 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149347191926 0.0996497079465 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845244438757 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251222352983 0.162205337803 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471683692322 0.0443174109184 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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