TPO 25 part 1
The professor claims that three arguments which says that the vessels were used as batteries in ancient times is not convincing and gives three reasons why this is true. These reasons contradict the reading's claim, which says that the vessels were not used as batteries in ancient times/
To begin with, the professor claims that the ancient people may have throw away the metal wires. He goes on explaining that the vessels were discovered by locals, not archeologists. Local people may have found other materials located near the jars. However, they were not archeologists, they cannot see the importance of those. As a consequence, they might have overlooked and thrown those away. From what the professor presents, it can be concluded that the vessels were used as batteries. This calls the reading's claim, which says that there were no metal wires located near the vessels, into question.
What is more, the reading says that no scrolls found inside the jars can be explained for the fact that the vessels were used as batteries. The professor, however, asserts that although copper cylinders look like the copper cylinders discovered in the ruins of Seleucia, it does not prove that the vessels cannot be use as batteries. According to professor, the copper cylinders were designed to keep scrolls. Ancient inventor later discovered that if people use them together with iron rods and some liquids, there will be electricity. That's how ancient batteries could have been born. Thus, the vessels were actually use as batteries.
Last but not least, the professor points out that the vessels were useful to people in ancient times. He starts explaining that the vessels can produce shock when people touched it. This could have been interpreted as evidence of some invisible power. People can easily see how people could convince others that they had magical powers through the use of batteries. Moreover, the batteries could have been used for healing. Modern medicines use this mild electric to stimulate muscles and relieve aches and pains. This directly runs against the reading's claim, which says that if the vessel were used as batteries, they were useless to people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 538, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ome liquids, there will be electricity. Thats how ancient batteries could have been b...
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Line 5, column 620, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'used'.
Suggestion: used
...n born. Thus, the vessels were actually use as batteries. Last but not least, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 12.0772626932 174% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1373.03311258 133% => OK
No of words: 357.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12885154062 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43982575758 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 145.348785872 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47619047619 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 541.8 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 3.25607064018 369% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0114623849 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1904761905 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 7.06452816374 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.523643265745 0.272083759551 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171615961552 0.0996497079465 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700634565355 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.337623465245 0.162205337803 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115614617453 0.0443174109184 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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