TPO 26 integrated writing task

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TPO 26: integrated writing task

Submitted by sahar90o on Tue, 10/29/2019 - 13:06

The main topic of both the reading passage and the lecture is about the spread of zebra mussel in parts of North America and its detrimental consequences. The author describes three problems that have arisen due to the spread of mussels. However, the lecturer believes these problems are solvable and there are ways to control the negative effects of this situation.

First of all, the author mentions that mussels transfer from Europe to the east coast of North America by ballast water of ships and will soon colonize all of North America. However, the lecturer believes that there is an effective way to manage this situation. For instance, ships can empty the ballast water and refill in the ocean. Mussels could not endure salty water of the ocean and soon will die.

Secondly, the reading implies that zebra mussels in new habitat become dominant as they can cope with different conditions. Furthermore, they have no predators, hence they can reproduce easily and their population would increase rapidly. By contrast, the speaker points out that when the population of mussels increases some of the aquatic birds change their feeding habits and feed on these mussels. They can eat a lot of mussel. In this way mussels, the population would not increase anymore.

Finally, the author mentions the point that as zebra mussels feed on planktons, they become a food competitor for other fishes and have negative effects on the overall population of other freshwater fishes. The speaker concedes the negative effect of mussels on the fish population that feeds on planktons but asserts that theses mussels have a positive impact on the population of bottom fishes. Mussels produce nutrients for bottom fishes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...hen the population of mussels increases some of the aquatic birds change their feeding habi...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 415, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun mussel seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of mussels'.
Suggestion: a lot of mussels
...and feed on these mussels. They can eat a lot of mussel. In this way mussels, the population wo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1103202847 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.459839404 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512455516014 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 442.8 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.9727812707 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7333333333 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7333333333 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06452816374 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448360923937 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146116602328 0.0996497079465 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862299631584 0.0662205650399 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25312225441 0.162205337803 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394268924959 0.0443174109184 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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