TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

Both reading and writing are about "burning mirror", which was a tool that Greeks used it against the Romans when they have been attacked by them. The passage states that Greeks of Syracuse never really made such a device. However, the professor rebus the author's reasons and thinks the Greeks certainly made this weapon .

First, the author of the article says that the technology for manufacturing burning mirror was too sophisticated for Greeks. On the other hand, listening talks about how the Greeks were absolutely able to make it by simply using single sheets and small coppers.

Second, using burning mirror was impractical for the Greek due to the long time that it requires to be prepared. The professor casts doubt on this point and mentions that it just takes a long time if the whole ship is made of wood, whereas, the ship was not only made of wood. Something called pitch, was used in the ship in order to attach different parts of the vehicle. This substance burns in a really short time and it can lead to easier use of burning mirror.

Third, according to the reading, there is no point in creating burning mirror due to it is equal to arrows, which are the weapons that they were already using. The professor challenges this idea when he mentions that burning mirror can surprise the enemies since it shoots from an invisible place for them. Therefor, it can be more effective than flaming arrows.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ks the Greeks certainly made this weapon . First, the author of the article sa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, second, so, third, whereas, as to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1188.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 247.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80971659919 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41089920229 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8041746271 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06452816374 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356287381772 0.272083759551 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130344197673 0.0996497079465 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613630635903 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211351858153 0.162205337803 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329793097506 0.0443174109184 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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