tpo 31
The reading and the lecture give information about fine lines surrounded the bone skeleton of Sinosarus founded in the volcanic ashes. While the reading sugests that the fine line do not present the present of feathers on the sinosarus body, the lecture refutes the all the suggestions and provides three reasons to illustrate the points.
First, the reading mentions that the lines surrounding the skeleton bone was misinterpreted to a feather. The speakers refutes the idea. He mentions that the lines were not decompsition. Since the other animal fossiles are well preserved in the valconic ash, there is strong evidance that the sinosarase skeleton bone is well preserved too. Thus, this a clear evidence that the lines represent feahter, not as the reading indicates.
Second, contrary to what belief in the reading passage that the lines are more likely remaining of frills, the lecture mentions that there are chemical differences between feather and frills. While feather chemical stracture compose proteins and bita-carotiens, the friells contain only protiens. Study has done on the fossil indicated that it has high amount of beta-carotien, which suport the presents of feathers on sinosaras body.
Finally,feaher can also have other function rather than flying and thermoregulation. For example, some birds, like becok, spread their fathers to attract female. By studying the feahter caracteristc of Sinosaurase, scintistest found that it feather was colourfull. Therefore, there is a good chance that sinosaurs used thier feather as a disply to attract mates. Thus, This anothe suport to the argumnet that Sinosaures has feathers, and refutes the reading suggestions.
Overall, it seems that the lecture showed some discrepancies in the points illustrated in the reading material.
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the fine line do not present
the fine lines do not present
the lines surrounding the skeleton bone was misinterpreted to a feather.
the lines surrounding the skeleton bone were misinterpreted to a feather.
The speakers refutes the idea.
The speaker refutes the idea.
it feather was colourfull.
its feather was colourful.
Thus, This anothe suport to the argumnet that Sinosaures has feathers,
Thus, This is another support to the argumnet that Sinosaures have feathers,
Sentence: While the reading sugests that the fine line do not present the present of feathers on the sinosarus body, the lecture refutes the all the suggestions and provides three reasons to illustrate the points.
Error: sugests Suggestion: suggests
Error: sinosarus Suggestion: ?
Sentence: He mentions that the lines were not decompsition.
Error: decompsition Suggestion: decomposition
Sentence: Since the other animal fossiles are well preserved in the valconic ash, there is strong evidance that the sinosarase skeleton bone is well preserved too.
Error: evidance Suggestion: evidence
Error: sinosarase Suggestion: ?
Error: fossiles Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: valconic Suggestion: conic
Sentence: Thus, this a clear evidence that the lines represent feahter, not as the reading indicates.
Error: feahter Suggestion: feather
Sentence: While feather chemical stracture compose proteins and bita-carotiens, the friells contain only protiens.
Error: bita-carotiens Suggestion: bit carries
Error: friells Suggestion: frills
Error: protiens Suggestion: proteins
Error: stracture Suggestion: structure
Sentence: Study has done on the fossil indicated that it has high amount of beta-carotien, which suport the presents of feathers on sinosaras body.
Error: sinosaras Suggestion: ?
Error: suport Suggestion: support
Sentence: Finally,feaher can also have other function rather than flying and thermoregulation.
Error: feaher Suggestion: feather
Error: thermoregulation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For example, some birds, like becok, spread their fathers to attract female.
Error: becok Suggestion: beck
Sentence: By studying the feahter caracteristc of Sinosaurase, scintistest found that it feather was colourfull.
Error: feahter Suggestion: feather
Error: colourfull Suggestion: colorful
Error: caracteristc Suggestion: characteristic
Error: scintistest Suggestion: scientists
Sentence: Therefore, there is a good chance that sinosaurs used thier feather as a disply to attract mates.
Error: disply Suggestion: display
Error: thier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Thus, This anothe suport to the argumnet that Sinosaures has feathers, and refutes the reading suggestions.
Error: anothe Suggestion: another
Error: argumnet Suggestion: argument
Error: suport Suggestion: support
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 27 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 27 2
No. of Sentences: 16 12
No. of Words: 278 250
No. of Characters: 1479 1200
No. of Different Words: 153 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.083 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.32 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.75 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.407 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4