TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

The author of the reading passage and the professor both discuss that whether the skeletal bones, unearthed in Liaoning, China, were surrounded by the fine lines is feather or not. The author is against this idea and raises three hypotheses. However, the professor thinks that the author's theories contain some defects.

First of all, the author claims that the fine lines may be originated as a skin, after the dinosaurs death the skin decomposed into fibers. However, the professor disagrees by indicating that on the same side of the volcanic area, others fossils' skin structure is preserved well instead of decomposing into fibers.

In addition, the author states that the scients unsure that the fine lines belong to which part of Sinosauropteryx. And most of dinosaurs had frills, the lines is more likely as the frills. On the contrary, the professor refutes the author idea by explaining that the feater contains a specific type of protein which is the frills didn't have. After the chemical analyzes, the lines were detected the same protein as a feather.

Finally, the author raises the point that the functions of the feather are usually keeping the body temperature and assist to fly. According to the locations of fine lines, which is almost at the tail and on the backbone, the lines are not related to thermoregulate and help to fly. On the other hand, the professor asserts that there is a function of the feathers called the display function and use peacock as an example. Peacock's feathers are colorful and located in their tail in order to attract the partners. And the line's color is orange and white, it may have the same function as the peacock is.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dinosaurs'' or 'dinosaur's'?
Suggestion: dinosaurs'; dinosaur's
... may be originated as a skin, after the dinosaurs death the skin decomposed into fibers. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the dinosaurs') or simply say ''most dinosaurs''.
Suggestion: most of the dinosaurs; most dinosaurs
...g to which part of Sinosauropteryx. And most of dinosaurs had frills, the lines is more likely as...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...fic type of protein which is the frills didnt have. After the chemical analyzes, the ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, so, well, in addition, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1397.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91901408451 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54133405791 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510563380282 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 431.1 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0065112574 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7857142857 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342483834977 0.272083759551 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114975985806 0.0996497079465 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694318748939 0.0662205650399 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200399401703 0.162205337803 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548933170849 0.0443174109184 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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