TPO 32 - Integrated Writing
The text and lecture offer two opposing views on three possible theories about what might have caused the strange sounds that sailors in Russian submarines would sporadically hear starting in the 1960s and continuing the 1980s while patrolling the North Atlantic and the Arctic Ocean. Whereas the reading lists reasons to be supportive of those theories, the professor in the lecture counters those reasons explaining that these sounds definitely seem to be strange phenomena and no one is quite sure what source or sources of the odd sounds could be. But, there are certain problems with all the theories noted in the text and she refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the passage claims that the strange noises might be the calls of male or female Ocra whales. On the contrary, the professor rejects this point by saying that this cause seems plausible at first but, it is highly unlikely. Considering that the whales live near the surface of the oceans and submarines go deeply, these machines could not have heard the sounds.
Second, the reading posits that the sounds were caused by giant squid which are giant marine invertebrates that live deep in the ocean. With soft bodies and no skeleton, they are difficult to detect by sonar. However, the professor in the lecture opposing this point by explaining that these sounds started to be heard in the 1960s and reported for decades until they disappeared in the 1980s. If it was the giant squid that caused them, it seems unreasonable that they suddenly started to be heard one decade and all of a sudden stopped.
Third, the text states that Russian submarines might have heard the stray sounds from some military technology, like another country's submarines that were secretly patrolling the area. As they were secretly moving in the oceans, it means that they did not register on sonar. That is why Russian submarines' sonar could not hear them. In contrast, the professor says that this theory does not hold up. It is because it looked like the source of the strange sounds moved very swiftly and changed its direction very fast whereas no submarines could change their directions very quickly. Moreover, even today, we do not have the technology to build engines of the submarines to function silently let alone in the 1960s.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 296, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'submarines'' or 'submarine's'?
Suggestion: submarines'; submarine's
... register on sonar. That is why Russian submarines sonar could not hear them. In contrast,...
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Line 7, column 716, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nction silently let alone in the 1960s.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, third, whereas, while, in contrast, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1373.03311258 139% => OK
No of words: 387.0 270.72406181 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94832041344 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37849647706 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 145.348785872 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514211886305 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3925025141 49.2860985944 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.6875 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1875 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.510345123205 0.272083759551 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156864505845 0.0996497079465 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950993077917 0.0662205650399 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28106113587 0.162205337803 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993787380724 0.0443174109184 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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