TPO-32 - Integrated Writing Task Starting in the 1960s and continuing until the 1980s, sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the North Alantic and Arctic Ocean would occasionally hear strange sounds. These underwater noises reminded the submarine crews

The reading passage and the professor both discuss three possible theories that suggest the source of the sound detected by a Russian submarine And that happened between 1960 till 1980, While the author mentions explanations for that strange noises. The speaker debates that by explaining as follow.

First, the reading passage avers that the sound heard by submarine is whales female sound. Possibly, she is trying to attract the male. The speaker casts doubt on this point by telling that whales are living near the surface and submarine patrolling deep in the ocean. Moreover, if the sound from females wheals why sonar system does not detect that.

Second, the author debates that the sound may come from a giant squid. The professor counters act this by saying that the submarine heard that sound for two decay, and then disappear. Nevertheless, the squid is still alive, and no reason to stop 20 years later.

Third, the reading passage states that the sound could be happened by another submarine and this submarine use advance system so that we could not catch its picture on the sonar. The professor argues that by mentioning the information from a Russian submarine told us the sound is quick. Besides, the submarine not appeared on the sonar but its engine is big enough to make a massive sound, and this should at least heard. And but into consideration, the technology does not invent silent engine of submarine and submarine move speedily like the sound heard by a Russian submarine.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd that happened between 1960 till 1980, While the author mentions explanations f...
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Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
... The speaker debates that by explaining as follow. First, the reading passage avers that...
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Line 4, column 584, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the sound heard by a Russian submarine.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, third, while, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 252.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97222222222 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41346518204 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551587301587 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 369.9 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0432858177 49.2860985944 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3846153846 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36711255649 0.272083759551 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134431642182 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691639226023 0.0662205650399 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226099722716 0.162205337803 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544581532528 0.0443174109184 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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between 1960 till 1980
between 1960 and 1980
from1960 to 1980

whales are living near the surface and submarine patrolling deep in the ocean.
whales are living near the surface and submarines are patrolling deep in the ocean.

if the sound from females wheals why sonar system does not detect that.
if the sound is from females wheals why sonar system does not detect that.

and this submarine use advance system
and this submarine uses an advance system

the submarine not appeared on the sonar
the submarine is not appeared on the sonar

and submarine move speedily
and submarines move speedily

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flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Different Words: 134 150
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 252 250
No. of Characters: 1218 1200
No. of Different Words: 134 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.984 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.833 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.336 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.661 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4