TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

According to the author of the reading passage conditions on the Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible. The reading provides three hypotheses of support. The professor, on the other hand, is optimistic about another hypothesis in which they can avoid all the negative aspects of maintaining a permanent human presence on the Venus. He refutes each of the author's reason in the following.

In the first place, the article asserts that atmospheric pressure at Venus's surface is at least 90 times greater than the pressure at Earth's surface which means that all spacecrafts and anything human might land on Venus would be crushed as well. Contrary to what is argued in reading, the professor contends that by floating in the Venus's atmosphere we can avoid the risk of being exposed to that huge pressure. He elaborates on his hypothesis by adding some details such as an approved altitude for this purpose, which should be around fifty kilometeres above the surface. He believes that the pressure in this altitude equals virtually the pressure on the Earh's surface.

In addition, the article warns us about no reservoirs of water on Venus's surface and an atmosphere mainly composed of carbon dioxide, nitrogen, sulfuric acid, and approximately with no oxygen or water vapor. The professor refutes this point by saying that we can grasp water and oxygen from carbon dioxide and some other compounds through chemical process. Thus, there should not be any requirements for import of these resources.

Eventually, the author avers that very little sunlight reaches the planet surface due to very thick clouds that smothers the entire planet's surface. So there would be critical problem with exploiting solar energy. The professor rejects this claim by pointing toward his initial hypothesis again. He believes that not only at this altitude not only we would be able to reach the sun light but also we can exploi

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According to the author of the reading p...
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...the authors reason in the following. In the first place, the article asserts ...
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...y the pressure on the Earhs surface. In addition, the article warns us about ...
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...ments for import of these resources. Eventually, the author avers that very l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, thus, well, at least, in addition, such as, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 323.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11764705882 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60857547495 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551083591331 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1483060894 49.2860985944 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.2 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454890666183 0.272083759551 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1246200146 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989897212315 0.0662205650399 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245491308349 0.162205337803 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401492697113 0.0443174109184 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 63.6247240618 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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