TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The passage is about Venus and impossibilities to survive there like on mars and moon.Here writer has explained that it
is possible to make human station on mars and moon but it is impossible in Venus.Speakers contradicted the point and he finds many things is inaccurate when compared to lecture.

First,writer has mentioned that atmospheric pressure on Venus is 90 times more than earth surface and all the air crafts crashed if they reach to Venus because of this human settlement is impossible in Venus.But to some extent it is certainly possible to maintain human settlement over there.

Second,in Venus there is only Carbondioxide,Sulphur etc and there is no availability of water.Water should be supply from the Earth as per the reading lecture.But speaker has contradicted the point and he have seen the possibilities of producing water and oxygen by using available chemicals.

Third,very little amount of sunlight only reach to the Venus so little amount of sunlight prevent the use of solar system power so it is impossible for human survival.Speakers argues that whether there is the presence of little sunlight it is possible to produce electricity by collecting it.This is another point where we can experience contradicted theory.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Here
... to survive there like on mars and moon.Here writer has explained that it is possi...
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...d moon.Here writer has explained that it is possible to make human station on mar...
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... and moon but it is impossible in Venus.Speakers contradicted the point and he finds man...
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...te when compared to lecture. First,writer has mentioned that atmospheric pressure...
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Suggestion: But
...human settlement is impossible in Venus.But to some extent it is certainly possible...
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...n human settlement over there. Second,in Venus there is only Carbondioxide,Sulph...
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...ond,in Venus there is only Carbondioxide,Sulphur etc and there is no availability of wat...
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Suggestion: Water
...c and there is no availability of water.Water should be supply from the Earth as per ...
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...o availability of water.Water should be supply from the Earth as per the reading lectu...
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...om the Earth as per the reading lecture.But speaker has contradicted the point and ...
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...eaker has contradicted the point and he have seen the possibilities of producing wat...
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...n by using available chemicals. Third,very little amount of sunlight only reach to...
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... so it is impossible for human survival.Speakers argues that whether there is the presen...
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...to produce electricity by collecting it.This is another point where we can experienc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1061.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 200.0 270.72406181 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.305 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28614896193 2.5805825403 127% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 145.348785872 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 21.2450331126 235% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 27.7161956264 49.2860985944 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 265.25 110.228320801 241% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.0 21.698381199 230% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 4.19205298013 334% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340067136886 0.272083759551 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192326604306 0.0996497079465 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412686159112 0.0662205650399 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16804258647 0.162205337803 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058217825177 0.0443174109184 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.5 13.3589403974 213% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 12.27 53.8541721854 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 11.0289183223 218% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.35 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.42419426049 117% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 63.6247240618 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.7273730684 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.0 10.498013245 210% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.2008830022 259% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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