TPO 42 integrated writing
In the reading section, the writer contends that there are several solutions that businesses in glass production for buildings can use to prevent injuries to birds such as production of one-way glasses that is transparent in only one direction, using colorful designs on regular window glasses, and create artificial magnetic field to guide birds away from building; however, in the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the reading points by presenting some reasons and examples.
First of all, the writer claims that by replacing the regular clear glass with one-way glass which is transparent in only one direction, we can prevent the birds from flying through windows. In contrast, the professor rejects this notion by stating that one-way windows cannot act as a useful mean toward this purpose. One-way glasses act like mirrors, so birds may see the reflection of outside such as tree or sky and tempted to fly toward them. As a result, using these glasses just as bad as regular glasses because birds cannot understand them.
Furthermore, contrary to the idea in the reading part suggesting that by painting colorful lines and patterns on regular window glasses such as thin stripes we can avoid their collide with glasses, the lecturer asserts that by using these method we make some openings in glasses that can attract the birds because they cannot differentiate the regular glass with these openings. Moreover, if we limit the openings in the patterns, we may cause problems for people inside the building.
In addition, even though the writer states that by creating artificial magnetic field with using magnetic electromagnets devices we can guide the birds to stay away from buildings, the professor mentions that birds just use their magnetic field sense to travel long distances, and they use their eyes and the brightness of lights to travel short distances. Consequently, using this method is not very helpful.
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- Integrated writing (TPO 46) 80
- Integrated writing (TPO 49) 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Leadership comes naturally. One cannot learn to be a leader. 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this method' or 'these methods'?
Suggestion: this method; these methods
...ses, the lecturer asserts that by using these method we make some openings in glasses that c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, in addition, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 313.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17252396166 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56334382359 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498402555911 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 21.2450331126 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 143.078067269 49.2860985944 290% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 179.888888889 110.228320801 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.7777777778 21.698381199 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 7.06452816374 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.516578557229 0.272083759551 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.212257928804 0.0996497079465 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124284920271 0.0662205650399 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314273000048 0.162205337803 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824451473774 0.0443174109184 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 13.3589403974 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.7273730684 247% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.498013245 149% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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