TPO 42 Integrated Writing Task

Both the passage and the lecture discuss solutions to keep birds from being injured by flying through glasses of buildings. The author of the passage proposes several solutions to this problem. ON the other hand, the lecturer states that those solutions will not work effectively, and opposes each reason.
First, the passage states that by using one-way glasses, birds can not see through the glass, so they will not fly through it. Nevertheless, the professor rejects the author's view and illustrates that the one-way glass acts as a mirror, and birds have no understanding of mirrors. They will see the reflection of the sky or trees, and fly right into the glass.
Second, the reading claims that if they paint colorful stripes over the glass, people will still see outside, and birds do not try to fly into them anymore. Nonetheless, the lecturer rejects this idea and mentions that this method has problems. He states that these stripes will include openings, and birds see those openings as holes. They will fly through them. Unless, those holes be extremely small, which in that case rooms become too dark for people who live in them.
Finally, the author claims that birds use the Earth's magnetic field to travel. If constructors provide powerful electromagnets around the building, they can steer birds away from the building. However, the speaker refutes it, saying that birds use the magnetic field in very long distances, not on short trips. For example, from cold to warm countries before winters. He states that in short distances, they use their eyes and the brightness of the light.

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Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.042 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
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