TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The passage is mainly about birds which are being injured thinking glass as the open air and writer has mentioned some of the solution to solve and protect birds from injuries but speaker has contradicted writers view and express many thing inaccurate.

First,passage states that to protect birds from being injured buildings should be construct by using only one way direction with transparent glass.But speaker contradicted the point and he says that the surface of glass reflect like mirror and birds may be confused when they see the reflection of sky,open air etc.

Second,writer mentioned that building should construct by using colorful designs and stripes but speakers says that it will be dark for people if the stripes are built in the window.This is another point where we can experience the contradicted theory.

Third, as per the reading passage magnetic field emits magnetic signals which helps birds to navigate their direction away from the building.Speakers mentioned that birds are able to detect magnetic signals when are travelling to the long distance and it came to know that they use their eyes for navigate in shorter distance.This directly contradicted the passage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...s the open air and writer has mentioned some of the solution to solve and protect birds fro...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , passage
... express many thing inaccurate. First,passage states that to protect birds from being...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...ne way direction with transparent glass.But speaker contradicted the point and he s...
^^^
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , open
...used when they see the reflection of sky,open air etc. Second,writer mentioned tha...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , writer
...eflection of sky,open air etc. Second,writer mentioned that building should construc...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... if the stripes are built in the window.This is another point where we can experienc...
^^^^
Line 8, column 142, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Speakers
... their direction away from the building.Speakers mentioned that birds are able to detect...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 327, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...r eyes for navigate in shorter distance.This directly contradicted the passage. ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, third, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 30.3222958057 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 1373.03311258 74% => OK
No of words: 190.0 270.72406181 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34736842105 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80589012447 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594736842105 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 419.366225166 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 47.0 21.2450331126 221% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.4183508781 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 254.0 110.228320801 230% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 47.5 21.698381199 219% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06452816374 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392885725754 0.272083759551 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.218795241289 0.0996497079465 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592942259362 0.0662205650399 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218795241289 0.162205337803 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592942259362 0.0443174109184 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.5 13.3589403974 206% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 32.23 53.8541721854 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.4 11.0289183223 185% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.64 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 63.6247240618 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.8 10.498013245 198% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.2008830022 187% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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