TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

To deal with the problem that wild birds suffer injuries due to flying through glass windows, the passage proposes three solutions, namely, using one-way glass, painting stripes over the glass, and equipped with magnets. Unfortunately, the lecturer indicates that these methods are ineffective.

First, the passage contends that the one-way glass has only one side through which light can pass, so the birds will avoid the barrier-like object. On the contrary, the professor argues that the untransparent side of the one-way glass is like a mirror, which cannot be understood by birds. As a result, the birds will believe in what they can see in the mirror, like the sky or the trees, and still, fly through the glass.

Furthermore, according to the passage, decorations like colorful stripes can prevent birds from passing through the glass. This claim is refuted by the lecturer, which suggests that birds will regard the area that is not covered by the paintings as holes that they can fly through. Besides, minimizing the unpainted area is impractical neither because it will lead to lack of indoor luminosity.

Moreover, the passage holds that humans can solve this problem by emitting magnetic signals, which force the birds to change their directions. By contrast, the professor in the lecture contradicts this idea by pointing out that birds only leverage magnetic compass to navigate during a long-distance flight, such as a seasonal migration from cold places to somewhere warm. In fact, when they fly in urban areas, they depend on the brightness of the light. So they are unlikely to be affected by those equipments.

In short, the professor asserts that all these solutions presented by the passage are infeasible.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, moreover, so, still, in fact, in short, such as, as a result, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19217081851 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65237502512 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55871886121 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3925227314 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.230769231 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6153846154 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.464758754031 0.272083759551 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150990381887 0.0996497079465 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111842041927 0.0662205650399 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229664004902 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115194174686 0.0443174109184 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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