The passage proposes three benefits of replacing patients' paper-based records with those in electronic format. Unfortunately, all of these statements are contradicted by the lecture.
Firstly, the lecturer argues that using electronic records cannot lower the costs as much as the passage claims. In the article, establishing a record database could enable us to reduce our expenditures on storage and transportation, whereas the lecture weakens the significance of that new format by pointing out that paper-based records cannot be fully abandoned for some reasons, like backup and legal needs.
Secondly, the speaker asserts that medical errors are still likely to happen even we use electronic records. As shown in the article, doctors can make fewer mistakes thanks to the advanced form. By contrast, the lecture introduces the fact that the record of a patient is usually hand-written by a doctor then typed into the database by a staff, which demonstrates that the possibility of errors is not reduced.
Thirdly, the lecture opposes the passage's view that records in electronic form will facilitate medical research by indicating that such research is restricted by the laws in America, which are designed to protect people's privacy. Conversely, the passage overstates its benefits but avoids its low practicalities.
In short, all the advantages of having records in electronic forms provided by the passage are refuted by the specific reasons and examples in the lecture.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, whereas, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1262.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 230.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48695652174 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96789373036 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604347826087 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.3245463173 49.2860985944 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.2 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415012584483 0.272083759551 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143906700446 0.0996497079465 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890861972175 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212881136546 0.162205337803 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434304443224 0.0443174109184 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.2367328918 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.42419426049 118% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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