According to reading, medical record of the patients is store in electronic medium is beneficial rather than paper forms. Author gives three reasons by use the electronic database for storing patient medical information. However, the professor discusses about disadvantages of the storing the patients data in electronic medium and refutes each reasons of the authors which is represented in passages.
Firstly, the lecturer mentions that paper form storing data is crucial because electronic database back up consume more time and money and it is also require the legal permission to uses the patient’s information. Many doctor who save money for paper storage they indirectly spend in electronic database. Therefore, electronic medical record system is not reduced any cost. On the other hand, the reading implies that paper record consume place and electronic system record data easily accessible.
Secondly, the speaker explains that all doctor take the patients record on paper base and also they prescribe the medicine by handwriting. That information hospital staff enter in to electronic medium. Staff member might be misinterprete the information because of doctor poor handwriting. In traditional method all original paper can storage as paper data base and prevention of any error. In contrast, according the reading, electronic record is standardization form and minimum possibility of the error.
Lastly, the professor point out that patient’s record not easily useable for researches because any research purpose USA country require the permission of the government and patients. Some of patients are not agree for uses their medical information and block to their data. Therefore paper database is one optional helpful for research not electronic database. However, the reading states that, electronic system though needed information they can easily getting any location.
- Having less salary and success job is better than high salary and insecure job. agree or disagree? 70
- TPO-01 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, employees typically work five days a week for eight hours each day. However, many employees want to work a four-day week and are willing to accept less pay inorder to do so. A mandatory policy requiri 80
- TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o 73
- TOEFL integrated writing: communal online encyclopedia 80
- TPO-48 - Integrated Writing Task In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. These population declines and extinctions have serious consequences for the ecosystems 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
... about disadvantages of the storing the patients data in electronic medium and refutes e...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...sume more time and money and it is also require the legal permission to uses the patien...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 219, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun doctor seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many doctors'.
Suggestion: Many doctors
...to uses the patient's information. Many doctor who save money for paper storage they i...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 189, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Some of', you should use 'the' ('Some of the patients') or simply say ''Some patients''.
Suggestion: Some of the patients; Some patients
...mission of the government and patients. Some of patients are not agree for uses their medical in...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 214, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
... and patients. Some of patients are not agree for uses their medical information and ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 280, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...al information and block to their data. Therefore paper database is one optional helpful ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 461, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
...ough needed information they can easily getting any location.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70070422535 5.08290768461 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88179434435 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6496904297 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.1875 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.597248555661 0.272083759551 220% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.208325963538 0.0996497079465 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100222518106 0.0662205650399 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.384867087291 0.162205337803 237% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493443863154 0.0443174109184 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 53.8541721854 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.48 12.2367328918 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.