TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The reading states that the doctors should adopt electronic database in spite of the traditional paper to record patient's medical information since it has got many advantages. However, the lecturer casts doubts on the claims made in the reading by presenting some counter-arguments. She believes that the advantages of the electronic medical record system are uncertain.

Firstly, the author points out that electronic medical record system will reduce the cost by saving money on storing and transferring the records. In addition, the space required to store is negligible and also the data can be accessed from anywhere. This point is challenged by the lecturer and she states that the paper records will still be used and kept for emergency purposes since it contains the signature of the patients and acts as a legal record. Therefore, the money would not be saved because paper records will still need a storage cost.

Secondly, the author contends that since electronic records have a standard format of forms and do not require someone to write down the information, so chances of human error are less. Nonetheless, the lecturer rebuts this argument and suggest that doctor fill the information of patients by a pen on a paper and then this information is transferred by the nurse later on in the electronic database, so due to poor handwriting, the errors are still possible.

Finally, the author states that it helps the researchers to find information more easily on an electronic database sitting anywhere in the world. The professor, on the other hand, posits that according to the privacy law, the researchers can not have an access to the records because the rules are pretty strict and they would need permission from patients to have the access. Moreover, the patient can block the use of medical records too.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...ivacy law, the researchers can not have an access to the records because the rules are pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, in addition, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 301.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10299003322 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76429529214 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518272425249 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4863919001 49.2860985944 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 110.228320801 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0833333333 7.06452816374 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.601433449078 0.272083759551 221% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223356231431 0.0996497079465 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106084000285 0.0662205650399 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.353766032373 0.162205337803 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696876432947 0.0443174109184 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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