The reading and lecture are both about the storing and recording of medical information about patient. The reading coincides with the numerous advantages of the electronic approach rater than the negative impact of the traditional approach which were both established. However, the lecture disputes the advantages mentioned in the passage by substantiating the negativities in the ensuing paragraph.
First of all, the reading's standpoint is that the cost of storing and transferring of medical reports is cheaper in the electronic method which requires less space than the paper form. Also, it is stated that cost of transporting is less because its accessible. On the other hand, the professor in the lecture states that is factor is unreliable and not important because no cost saving is related. She claims that the paper form is advisable regardless of the limitations its necessary as a backup which can later be referred to for legal reasons which cost will be implemented
Secondly, the passage describes the second point stating that the electronic approach is prone to fewer errors because the database is often on the system which minimize error but the parer record can be imprinted with bad writing which results to bad consequence on the patients result. Besides this, the lecturer posits that doctors still enforce the use of pen to note when examining a patient, since this is obtained it is further if an error is made imprinted with the same report written by the doctor about the patient. which is disastrous.
Finally, the article establishes that electronic medium of recording is relatively faster in terms of gathering large amount of data because to a great extent, it is obtained on the computer system. In contrast, the lecturer rebuts this reason. the professor believes that its difficult to access because patient black their record which complicated procedures and strict protocols have to be observed before access is permitted.
In conclusion, the lecture has effective elaborated on the disadvantages of the stand point of the passage.
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...tronic approach is prone to fewer errors because the database is often on the sys...
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...ages of the stand point of the passage.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 10.4613686534 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 333.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22522522523 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81113162616 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 145.348785872 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537537537538 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 108.569286361 49.2860985944 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 133.846153846 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6153846154 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06452816374 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374919243572 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110004822119 0.0996497079465 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101141679419 0.0662205650399 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1709233409 0.162205337803 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869104203422 0.0443174109184 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.42419426049 116% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 63.6247240618 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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