The article states that there are some benefits of storing patient's medical records on electronic system rather than store them in traditional base record keeping, and it provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that they are uncertain advantages and he refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that it may reducing the money required for storing and transferring medical records as paper record require a significant amount of storage space but in case of computerized storing it takes no space. But the professor refutes this point by explaining that most doctors still prefer to use pen and papers to take notes and record the data manually and recording electronically is always discontinue.
Second, the article posits that record electronically may reduce the errors that may occur by illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data and nonstandard organization of paper records. However, the professor opposes this point by saying that errors are always exist because the doctors use to write in paper and they are not the persons who entered the data, in order to that, errors have big chance to occur.
Third, the reading passage says that it may aiding research and give the researchers the ability to gather large amount of data from patient records. Although, the professor refutes this point by saying that the medical researchers face many difficulties to reach on the data because they must follow restricted and hard procedures. In addition to that, the patients could block the use of their data in medical researches.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'discontinued'.
Suggestion: discontinued
... and recording electronically is always discontinue. Second, the article posits that rec...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
... point by saying that errors are always exist because the doctors use to write in pap...
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Line 5, column 297, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...rs are always exist because the doctors use to write in paper and they are not the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, third, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1345.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 255.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27450980392 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71727072062 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552941176471 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0292445954 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.444444444 110.228320801 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 7.06452816374 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.510141939076 0.272083759551 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202856920489 0.0996497079465 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124931134031 0.0662205650399 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304536741199 0.162205337803 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0962567527126 0.0443174109184 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.3589403974 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.8541721854 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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