tpo 46 w task1;
The reading and the lecture both discuss the use of electronic medical record system superseding the pervious ways of archiving medical records of patients, while the reading discribes it very useful; The professor think it is not that beneficary and the users will still face the pervious problems.
The reading alleged that by useing the new method costs of keeping and storaging will drop drametically because they will take no place and they are all recorded on a computer in a database. Nevertheless the teacher had claimed that it is not that benificary that the reading suggests because, still doctors use the paper and write in them in the case of either emergancy or referencing or even when they need signature on it for privacy issues.
The other reasons why the reading suggests that useing electronical records is booning is preventing errors such as: illigeible handwritting, improper transcription and nonstandard organization of paper records which in some cases even caused a sever resualt for the patients' health. On the other hand, the professor asserts that doctors while giving presceriptions to patients they use stylus and paper. And later on, their assitance will register the information and preserve it on the computer and that person will still face the old challenges.
In the long run, the reading believes that electronicals medical records will help reaserching due to ease of accessing to information and excavting patients records of different doctors and hospitals easily. Whereas the teacher talks about United States policy of accesing medical records of patinets which need the patients legimiticy to access it. Moreover, it is a complex and unwieldy procedure that will not be easy as the reading suggests. Furthermore, the pationt can also block accesing to her/his records.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 191, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...l recorded on a computer in a database. Nevertheless the teacher had claimed that it is not ...
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Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e paper and write in them in the case of either emergancy or referencing or even ...
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Line 4, column 268, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...ses even caused a sever resualt for the patients health. On the other hand, the professo...
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Line 4, column 418, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...they use stylus and paper. And later on, their assitance will register the inform...
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Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...different doctors and hospitals easily. Whereas the teacher talks about United States p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, whereas, while, such as, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2724137931 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80124186831 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548275862069 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.8050789855 49.2860985944 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.9 110.228320801 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 21.698381199 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 7.06452816374 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378659151894 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143996703436 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113291590528 0.0662205650399 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23404879088 0.162205337803 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767235422732 0.0443174109184 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.3589403974 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 53.8541721854 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.42419426049 115% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.