TPO 47 Integrated writing essay
Pterosaurs were an ancient group of winged reptiles that lived alongside the dinosaurs. Many pterosaurs were very large, some as large as a giraffe and with a wingspan of over 12 meters. Paleontologists have long wondered whether large pterosaurs were capable of powered flight (flying by flapping their wings) or whether they were able only to glide. Several arguments have been made against powered flight.Doubters point out that since modern reptiles are cold-blooded, ancient reptiles such as pterosaurs were probably cold-blooded as well. Cold-blooded animals typically have a slow metabolism and are unable to produce a lot of energy. Powered flight is an activity requiring a lot of energy, which is why all modern vertebrates that fly are warm-blooded, not cold-blooded. It seemed unlikely that pterosaurs would have been able to generate the energy needed to fly.Second, there is a limit to the weight of animals that can be kept airborne by powered flight. Pterosaurs that were as large as a giraffe were probably so heavy that they would not have been able to flap their wings fast enough to stay aloft for any length of time.Third, all animals with powered flight are able to take off from the ground. For example, birds take off by jumping from their legs or running to gain speed and then jumping. But these methods would not have worked for large pterosaurs. Large pterosaurs would have needed big, powerful muscles in their back legs to launch themselves into the air, and we know from fossilized bones that their back leg muscles were too small and weak to allow the pterosaurs to run fast enough or jump high enough to launch themselves into the air..t only using the back legs. So that they may have the ability of powered flight.
- TPO 47 Integrated writing essay 3
- Directions: You have 30 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typic 3
- TPO 47 Integrated writing essay 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 407, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Doubters
...s have been made against powered flight.Doubters point out that since modern reptiles ar...
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Line 1, column 871, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Second
...le to generate the energy needed to fly.Second, there is a limit to the weight of anim...
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Line 1, column 1136, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Third
...gh to stay aloft for any length of time.Third, all animals with powered flight are ab...
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Line 1, column 1666, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...enough to launch themselves into the air..t only using the back legs. So that they...
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Line 1, column 1696, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to the air..t only using the back legs. So that they may have the ability of powered fl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, second, so, then, third, well, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 295.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92542372881 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63764103778 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518644067797 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.3221974741 49.2860985944 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.083333333 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 21.698381199 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.986335576348 0.272083759551 363% => The coherence between essay topic and essay body is overfitting.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.34993081785 0.0996497079465 351% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129039505874 0.0662205650399 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.986335576348 0.162205337803 608% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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