TPO 52-integrated writing task
From the reading passage, it proposes that asteroids are a planet that better than Mars or Moon to set up a colony for human to live or work. How ever the lecturer proposes counterpoint to revert the outcome that the reading passage provided.
To begin with, the reading mentioned about the low gravity that unique to asteroid due to the size of the it, thus the spacecraft would be easy to take on and take off and the cost of fuel would be less for the trip back to earth. however, the lecturer make the point of many risks that could happened such as health issues. Losing bone density and muscle mass as a long-term condition would not benefit human. living in the low gravity environment could cause the significant health issues that we could not miss it.
Moving on, the reading passage propose that human can set up a mining company and get profit from the gold and platinum. however, the lecturer brings about the cost of supporting the mining group could be a huge problem. Also the transporting method to taking the precious minerals back to earth, thus the profit would be less than thought.
Finally, the reading passage proposed that the asteroid are closer to earth, so it would be easy to get back to earth. The lecturer mentioned about that the orbit path is unpredictable, probably the distance between asteroid and earth are much far away.
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| 2023-03-10 | sonyeoso | 81 | view |
| 2021-08-19 | Percival Wong | 81 | view |
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- Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. 70
- Governments should not fund any scientific research whose consequences are unclear. 50
- Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and expl 45
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: HOW_EVER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'however'?
Suggestion: However
... up a colony for human to live or work. How ever the lecturer proposes counterpoint to r...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...t unique to asteroid due to the size of the it, thus the spacecraft would be easy to t...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...uld be less for the trip back to earth. however, the lecturer make the point of many ri...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and muscle mass as a long-term condition would not benefit human. living in the l...
^^
Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Living
...erm condition would not benefit human. living in the low gravity environment could ca...
^^^^^^
Line 11, column 122, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... get profit from the gold and platinum. however, the lecturer brings about the cost of ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 222, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e mining group could be a huge problem. Also the transporting method to taking the p...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, so, thus, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1140.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 240.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34929067309 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529166666667 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 342.0 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6618271349 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.636363636 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 7.06452816374 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 53.8541721854 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.