TPO 54. The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfall or rivers. If the trend continues, the lake's water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations. The lake would then become essentially a dead zone. Fortunately, there are several ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake's health.
One option is direct removal of salt from the lake's water in special desalination facilities. Water from the lake would be pumped into the facilities and heated. This would cause the water to evaporate into steam, while salt and other materials dissolved in the water would be left behind. The steam would then be cooled down and returned to the lake as salt-free water. Gradually, the high salt levels would be reduced and the lake’s overall health would be restored.
Another possible solution is to dilute the salt level in the lake with water from the ocean. Since water in the Pacific Ocean is 20 percent less salty than water in the lake, bringing ocean water into the lake would decrease the lake’s salinity. The ocean water could be delivered through pipelines or canals.
Yet another solution would be to control the lake's salinity by constructing walls to divide the lake into several sections. In the smaller sections, salinity would be allowed to increase. However, in the main and largest section, salinity would be reduced and controlled by, among other things, directing all the freshwater from small rivers in the area to flow into that main section of the lake.
The author of reading, belive that Salton Sea in California going to be salty, and as soon as the lack could not support the livestaks. The author provide 3 solution for handling it. however, the speaker refutes each reason.
the author cliams that, we can remove salt from lake by using desalination facilities. on the other hand the speaker explains it is not a good idea. The lecturere states that removing salt from lake cause many bigger problem. When the salt degree of lack reduce and water of lake evaporate, there will remain other type of sedimates. this sedimates will have chemical interaction and make toxid. this toxid is very dangerous for health. So, she believe that it is not a good idea.
The passage state that we can bring water from oceans to solve this problem, but the speaker contents this opinion, and explains this idea is expensive, and need many resource. she continue, A local government do not have this amout of mony to build and maintenance of puplines adn canals.
The author suggests that we can build some walls in lake. however, the speaker reject this idea by saying that wall will be destroyed after while. it need expense frequently. The lecturer state that if the wall distroy, eveythings will be like past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1042.0 1373.03311258 76% => OK
No of words: 216.0 270.72406181 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82407407407 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37894499447 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587962962963 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4835598016 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.125 110.228320801 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.5 21.698381199 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.875 7.06452816374 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143369009088 0.272083759551 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456000932442 0.0996497079465 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480131045794 0.0662205650399 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0836437640053 0.162205337803 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449874265507 0.0443174109184 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 13.3589403974 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 53.8541721854 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 12.2367328918 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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