TPO24 Integrated Writing
The reading and the lecture materials have a debate on the discovery about a 70 million years old fossil of Tyrannosaurs rex. The writer believes that T rex’s fossil contain many actual tissues, which is refuted by the lecture.
First of all, the writer states that the scientists find some soft substance in the leg bone and they believe that this soft substance is the remains of the actual blood vessels of T. rex. However, the professor opposes this claim by saying that the soft flexible substance inside is traces of soft and moist residue after bacteria colonies. It is because after an organism is dead, bacteria sometimes colonize hollows in bones, which leaves behind traces of organic materials.
Moreover, the writer says that spheres with iron and red centers could be the remains of red blood cells, while the speaker views this issue from an opposite angle. The professor says that scientists find the reddish spheres in fossils of other animals in the same place. So it cannot be the remains of read blood cells and it may be a pieces of reddish mineral.
Finally, the writer says that scientist found collagen, which is considered in connection with bone tissues. But the professor holds an opposite opinion: collagen cannot survive long time. And there is most likely explanation is that the collagen is not from T. Rex and it may come from the skin of the researchers who are handing the bone.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 335, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a piece' or simply 'pieces'?
Suggestion: a piece; pieces
...mains of read blood cells and it may be a pieces of reddish mineral. Finally, the wri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, may, moreover, so, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1184.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 243.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87242798354 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4031794325 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551440329218 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.420197559 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6666666667 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409154250259 0.272083759551 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130178160826 0.0996497079465 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705292763891 0.0662205650399 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218868246799 0.162205337803 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416019752756 0.0443174109184 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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