TPO46
The reading specifies that there are three advantagous in using electronic data instead of paper data. The professor, however, explains that this benefits are uncertain and dobious and provide some evidence to refute them all.
First, electronic medical records do not need many space and it can be transfer when the doctors need it easily. Hence, it help to save money because there is no need of paying money for storage. Conversely, the lecturer opposes this point by saying that the doctors who use electronic record do not throw out their paper records and they use it in emergency times. Therefore, they must pay for storage which not help them to save money.
Second, the author states that the electronic medical records are essential to decreasing the chances of medial fatal. Legible handwriting, improper transcription of data and nonstandard organization of paper are example of errors which it is plausible to have serious consequences for patients health. In contrast, the professor explains that doctors use pen and paper for writing the situation of patient and it is possible that the staff who write it on computer make mistakes because of the poor handwriting. Thus, if a doctor writes with a bad handwriting, it is feasible his staff make a dangerous error or mistake.
Third, the passage asserts that large amount of paper cannot be used but with the existence of electronic medical records, doctors can easily have access to the needed information by searching the information. Nevertheless, the talker contradicts this point by reasoning that using the information of patient are an arduous task and this information is private and doctors must ask permission form government and the person before using it and also the patient at any moment can block the use for any bod except himself.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 47, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun space seems to be countable; consider using: 'many spaces'.
Suggestion: many spaces
... electronic medical records do not need many space and it can be transfer when the doctors...
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Line 2, column 123, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...n the doctors need it easily. Hence, it help to save money because there is no need ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, third, thus, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 298.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08724832215 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71625588521 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553691275168 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9170353972 49.2860985944 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 21.698381199 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462061234483 0.272083759551 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159111366278 0.0996497079465 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103368454243 0.0662205650399 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249837362629 0.162205337803 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805977573092 0.0443174109184 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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