The world’s forests are facing increasing pressure which, if left unchecked, will threaten the health of many industries, economies, nations, and lives. The development of an international fund to help developing countries implement useful conservation techniques in forest protection is the best way to protect the world’s forests and hopefully reverse negative trends that imperil our forests.
Using the internationally established forest protection fund to protect forest agriculture is perhaps the most important initiative. Dispersing these funds to governments, land owners, and farmers will allow them to resist intrusions by the logging industry, oil companies, and property developers who are after their land. This is a very specific initiative that will help agricultural areas from being developed into environmentally damaging industries and ensure that agricultural farm use is uninterrupted.
A second use of this protection fund could be used to develop the economies of villages and tribal communities located in forest areas. By parceling out funds to provide villagers and tribal residents of forests with a stipend will help these people continue their way of life and resist pressure to convert their forest land to the above mentioned industries. Providing living stipends and other financial aid to forest residents will help people afford education, health services, and nutritional aid so that they are less tempted to resort to destructive or exploitative forest practices to make a living. Much of the global concern with deforestation focuses on the alarming loss of biodiversity. Humans use thousands of species of plants and animals on a daily basis for food, shelter, clothing and medicinal needs. Deforestation threatens species that humans rely on for these essential services. Using the international fund to help governments and people establish protected forest areas is the best way to maintain valuable forest biodiversity and protect species from exploitation, endangerment and extinction.
Based on the given materials, the article as well as the lecture discusse the diforestation problem and a new raised fund for protecting these areas. The author proposes some of the possible ways to implement such fund in order to protect forests from heavt pressure of industery. That being sad, the lecturer provides several ideas to repudiate this claim.
Initially, it is alleged in the reading that this money can be used for expansion of agriculture which is the most important approach. However the author asserts that the agricultural land themselves are one of the reasons for deforestation. He alludes to the fact that farmers use pesticides an nutrilizers to grow more in order to feed the growing population. These toxics and chemicals are eventulay washed away by run of water and as a results contribute to deforestation. So it is not a good idea to expand farming lands.
Second, the writer proclaims that the investment of this money to developing the economy of villages located in forest can help in this manner. Yet again the speaker underscores that to do so the money should be handed to forest owners which are governments so consequently there is no way to make sure a government spend this money for the villagers. Also if a government invest the money, There is no way to know if this money is invested affectively.
The final point of contention between the reading and listening passages is the use of the fund for estabilishing protected areas for saving biodiversity. On the other hand, The lecturer points out that these areas themselves will become a source for exploiting them and extracting materials that humans realy on. This sows that this approach is not appropriate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ecting these areas. The author proposes some of the possible ways to implement such fund in...
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Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e which is the most important approach. However the author asserts that the agricultura...
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Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...to the fact that farmers use pesticides an nutrilizers to grow more in order to fe...
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Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...ulay washed away by run of water and as a results contribute to deforestation. So it is n...
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Line 9, column 353, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ent spend this money for the villagers. Also if a government invest the money, There...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, second, so, well, as for, as to, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 287.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00348432056 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87764801354 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578397212544 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9058711974 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.571428571 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06452816374 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0966405322161 0.272083759551 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311426914857 0.0996497079465 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355218517977 0.0662205650399 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0559844977267 0.162205337803 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127562979864 0.0443174109184 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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