The writing passage and lecture are both about propabillty of extinction of rhinoceros horn due to illegal sale by poachers. The author of article demonsterates three ideas to save rhinocerose horn from extinction, the lecturer casts doubt on claims made in article. She believes that these ideas significantly weaks.
To bigen with, the author states first way, he suggests removing of the horn by surgery to make the rhinoceros less attractive. Thia point challenge by lecturer. She thinks, in addition to the time that need to cought the rhinoceros and many eguipment are needed to make surgery, dehorn of rhinoceros lead to worsen their health, because they use theies horn to dig grouynd to seek for food in order to survive, consequntly removing of these horn will lead to decline number of rhinoceros.
In addition, the writer elaborates to the other way to prevent rhinoceros extinction by education the consumer that horn composed of keratin which is same material found in human hair and nails so decrease the demand for rhino horn. This argument rebutted from professor, She mentions this idea is unlikly effective, the concept that horn important for medicine purpose that the people believe, it is difficult for recent scienist to change old believes, since the consumers dose not eccept new scientist concept.
Lastly, the author claims another way to decrease the demand of rhino horn by legalize government sale of rhino horn in low price. In the other hand, the professsor illustrates that this way inpredictible, he thinks when the government sale horns which are consider illegal for pouchers, this will encourage the consumer to do the same thing and sale these horns, since the population of rhinos will decrease, therfore demand of horn will increase, furthermore, the cost of rhino horn will increase
The writing passage and lecture are both about propabillty of extinction of rhinoceros horn due to illegal sale by poachers. The author of article demonsterates three ideas to save rhinocerose horn from extinction, the lecturer casts doubt on claims made in article. She believes that these ideas significantly weaks.
To bigen with, the author states first way, he suggests removing of the horn by surgery to make the rhinoceros less attractive. Thia point challenge by lecturer. She thinks, in addition to the time that need to cought the rhinoceros and many eguipment are needed to make surgery, dehorn of rhinoceros lead to worsen their health, because they use theies horn to dig grouynd to seek for food in order to survive, consequntly removing of these horn will lead to decline number of rhinoceros.
In addition, the writer elaborates to the other way to prevent rhinoceros extinction by education the consumer that horn composed of keratin which is same material found in human hair and nails so decrease the demand for rhino horn. This argument rebutted from professor, She mentions this idea is unlikly effective, the concept that horn important for medicine purpose that the people believe, it is difficult for recent scienist to change old believes, since the consumers dose not eccept new scientist concept.
Lastly, the author claims another way to decrease the demand of rhino horn by legalize government sale of rhino horn in low price. In the other hand, the professsor illustrates that this way inpredictible, he thinks when the government sale horns which are consider illegal for pouchers, this will encourage the consumer to do the same thing and sale these horns, since the population of rhinos will decrease, therfore demand of horn will increase, furthermore, the cost of rhino horn will increase
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... that these ideas significantly weaks. To bigen with, the author states first w...
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... lead to decline number of rhinoceros. In addition, the writer elaborates to th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...dose not eccept new scientist concept. Lastly, the author claims another way to...
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Suggestion: considered
...hen the government sale horns which are consider illegal for pouchers, this will encoura...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, so, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 297.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15151515152 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68420921013 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56228956229 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.51032209 49.2860985944 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.0 110.228320801 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7 21.698381199 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 7.06452816374 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40843559158 0.272083759551 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181985897105 0.0996497079465 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.197468618953 0.0662205650399 298% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292148964609 0.162205337803 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.278698668487 0.0443174109184 629% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.3589403974 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 53.8541721854 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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