Your mentor recommended you to learn a new language and gave you contact details of a teacher Following his advice you need to write a letter to the teacher and say What is your motivation to learn a new language How can the teacher help you When will you

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Your mentor recommended you to learn a new language and gave you contact details of a teacher. Following his advice, you need to write a letter to the teacher and say
- What is your motivation to learn a new language?
- How can the teacher help you?
- When will you be ready to start?

Submitted by Anu_31 on Fri, 07/03/2015 - 15:43

Dear Sir,

I am Rose and I am writing this letter to express my desire to learn French language from you. I am selected from my batch for annual student exchange program and I have to travel Paris for my next semester. My mentor, Mr David has recommended you for taking French lessons, therefore I am writing this letter.

Although, I have been practicing French for a while but I am weak in speaking. Furthermore, as I am going for research project I may need to do lot of writing work. I need your guidance in both speaking and writing.

My current semester is going to end in June and next semester in Paris will start from September. I want to utilize month of August in learning and practicing French as much as I can. I would be grateful if you can accommodate me in regular classes and also provide me extra tutorials. Could you please let me know your fees and schedule for classes.

Looking forward to hear from you.

Yours Truly
Rose

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I would be grateful id you can tell accommodate me in regular classes
Description: can you re-write this sentence?

Looking forward to hear from you.
Looking forward to hearing from you.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 10
No. of Words: 175 200
No. of Characters: 753 1000
No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.637 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.303 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.418 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 52 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.185 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.308 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.73 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.225 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4

Hi ,
Thanks.
I have re written the sentence, it was a typing mistake.

Could you please tell me areas of improvement in this letter.
How was this letter in terms of TA LR etc?

Is it possible for a test taker to achieve 9 in task achievement?
How many words should be written to get a band of 7 .

Thanks

TA: 7.0
LR: 6.5
GA: 6.0
CC: 6.5
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Q: Is it possible for a test taker to achieve 9 in task achievement?
A: You can't get 9.0 alone in task achievement. It is related to LR, GA, CC

Q: How many words should be written to get a band of 7 .
A: 150 - 220 words are all OK
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suggestions:
Need to write better sentences, don't always use 'I' as the subject of a sentence.