The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarize the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph evinces information about the percentage of old people age of which are 65 and over and lived in the USA, Sweden, and Japan from 1940 to 2040.
In 1940, population of aged people in Japan and Sweden were respectively around 5% and 7% when USA had the highest percentage approximately 10%. In the following year, both of Sweden and USA gained higher amount than the previous year. Moreover, aged people population of Sweden and USA increased sharply in the year after, instead of Japan’s downturn occurred on the upcoming years. Japan reached turning point during 1980 to 2000 and increased constantly until it will escalate to 25% above throughout 2020 to 2040. On other hand, USA deteriorated among 1980 to 2020, but are expected to have increasing over 25% while Sweden increased steadily through the years, additionally reach 20% between 2000 to 2020, however will get lower rate than Japan while heading to 2040.
Overall, this line graph represent that Japan whose population of aged people was the lowest than three countries mentioned above is predicted to attain the highest number of aged people in the next 2040.
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Sentence: The line graph evinces information about the percentage of old people age of which are 65 and over and lived in the USA, Sweden, and Japan from 1940 to 2040.
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In 1940, population of aged people in Japan
In 1940, the population of aged people in Japan
Sentence: Moreover, aged people population of Sweden and USA increased sharply in the year after, instead of Japan's downturn occurred on the upcoming years.
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Suggestion: Refer to people and population
but are expected to have increasing over 25
but are expected to increase over 25
Sentence: Overall, this line graph represent that Japan whose population of aged people was the lowest than three countries mentioned above is predicted to attain the highest number of aged people in the next 2040.
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