"The following was used as part of an internet advertising company's appeal to businesses: Furniture Depot employed our internet advertising company to help. Since then its sales increased by 10% over last year's totals. Furniture Depot's success demonstrates how using our internet services can increase your profitability. "
The success of any business is dependent on numerous factors.And of-course, publicity is the key factor for it.The points stated above does not provide enough reasons to support the statement.Furniture Depot employed the internet service but it is not clearly mentioned that what help the advertising company provided.It dose not clearly cite the data used to calculate the increase in sales.More light should be shed on the method or formula used to calculate the rise in sales.The current figure mentioned of 10% rise might not have considered other factors that have helped in making profit.
It has been mentioned that sales were increased by 10% from previous year.This does not strengthen the point that advertising company is only responsible for it.It might be possible that the quality and design of furniture was improved which led to increase in sales. Any business cannot rely only on one publicity strategy, so it is obvious that there might be advertisements on televisions, hoardings, pamphlets to make more people aware of the furniture depot.Also, the sale of any shop also depends on how the customers are attended and treated.This is primarily the duty of sales staff at the Depot. It is quite possible that a new salesperson was appointed who was more appealing and could attract more customers.There is no point mentioned about the sales and offers provided by the Furniture Depot in the current year and previous year. Hence, there is a probability that sales marked up in the current year because of the exciting and interesting offers provided.
There might be possibility that furniture depot have started online shopping as well from current year.Online shopping is convenient with the current lifestyle where we have little time to go out and buy stuff. With increase in people's choice for online shopping there has been tremendous growth for all online shopping marts.So the rise in sales can be due to online service provided by furniture depot which has not been mentioned.Thus, it cannot be concluded that sales were gone up just because of internet advertising while it can be just one of the factors.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255376344086 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.201612903226 0.15541462614 130% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0860215053763 0.0836205057962 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0645161290323 0.0520304965353 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0188172043011 0.0272364105082 69% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129032258065 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0537634408602 0.0416121511921 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89426738113 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0188172043011 0.026700313972 70% => OK
Particles: 0.00806451612903 0.001811407834 445% => OK
Determiners: 0.0833333333333 0.113004496875 74% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0268817204301 0.0255425247493 105% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0215053763441 0.0127820249294 168% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2203.0 2731.13054187 81% => OK
No of words: 350.0 446.07635468 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.29428571429 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.368571428571 0.378187486979 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288571428571 0.287650121315 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.217142857143 0.208842608468 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.148571428571 0.135150697306 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89426738113 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 207.018472906 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511428571429 0.469332199767 109% => OK
Word variations: 54.0512506779 52.1807786196 104% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 20.039408867 35% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 50.0 23.2022227129 215% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 143.934367129 57.7814097925 249% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 314.714285714 141.986410481 222% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.0 23.2022227129 215% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 0.724660767414 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.14285714286 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 3.58251231527 530% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 78.8571428571 51.9672348444 152% => OK
Elegance: 1.53773584906 1.8405768891 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240912294573 0.441005458295 55% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.243387392754 0.135418324435 180% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0698180311618 0.0829849096947 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.740666666331 0.58762219726 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126420393534 0.147661913831 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136631212661 0.193483328276 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505388157641 0.0970749176394 52% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.477960575712 0.42659136922 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0898722860053 0.0774707102158 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188329506801 0.312017818177 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297789841177 0.0698173142475 43% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.87684729064 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 14.657635468 48% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 42.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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