Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the
most important factor in the successful development of a country
Undoubtedly, with the evolution of humankind over the past several thousand years, man has made tremendous progress in all aspects of life and become more successful. Recent technological advancements have changed the way people live radically and countries all over the world are now investigating new ways to implement in order to be more successful. In this modern society, people always encounter the dilemma on whether the improvement of schools is the most important factor in creating a progressed and thriving country or not. With regards to this question, diverse responses is given. Consequently, it is unfeasible to reach a consensus. Personally, I am on the belief that schools are the prime factors in progress of a country. In the following discussion, I would like to bolster my standpoint.
To begin with, one of the compelling reasons that justifies the thesis is that the very first step in educational process of a person starts with school. To put it in general world, the inception of people formal education are at schools. Bearing in mind the previous claim, the crucial role of schools in our life is an axiom and an indisputable fact. To shed more light on this issue, when we inscribe in school, we undergo a specific system of discipline which produces a system of manners that has a vital effect on shaping a student’s behavior and if the school’s discipline system acts its role correctly we will have a good mannered and successful society. For instance, when I was at school, I was taught to be at school before 7 o’clock and from that experience I learned the importance of being on schedule that has a significant upshot on my success.
Alongside with the foregone reason that elaborated above, the importance of a team work in a successful society is another point that requires meticulous attention. To clarify, due to the fact that a major part of schools chores are based on collaboration among students, this engenders a sense of team work in all students, that being said, when they grow up (maturate) and take their own significant (momentous) part in society, they cherish the ability of team work and utilize it in order to be more successful and thereby the society benefits as well and becomes more successful. Take my situation at school as an example, I was given a lot of tasks that could be done only by a team and it was impossible to perform them alone. As the time passed I was encountered some tasks that could be done alone but still I tend to do them by my team because I had understood the importance of team work. Doing the same as I grow up, I managed to accomplish a lot of arduous tasks for my country by my team and now I am very successful. Needless to say, I am a member of society that I live in, hence I contributed to country’s success as well by applying the method that I learned at school.
There is no unanimity in society on the controversial issue that what the most important element of a prosperous society is. .While it seems hard to reach a universal answer, drawing upon aforementioned reasons, I deem that schools are the chief component of a successful country. To repeat the reasons a good discipline system and team work are prime factors and I think they carry more weight.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'while', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in general', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230273752013 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.161030595813 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.085346215781 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0402576489533 0.046263068375 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0644122383253 0.0685040099705 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135265700483 0.118717715034 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0305958132045 0.0351676179071 87% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87551298834 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0305958132045 0.0309702414327 99% => OK
Particles: 0.00161030595813 0.00188951952338 85% => OK
Determiners: 0.107890499195 0.0887237588012 122% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00644122383253 0.0209618222197 31% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0209339774557 0.0139019557991 151% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3265.0 2387.08602151 137% => OK
No of words: 570.0 408.028673835 140% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72807017544 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335087719298 0.338922669872 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.270175438596 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.178947368421 0.174417080927 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131578947368 0.112833075102 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87551298834 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489473684211 0.524397521467 93% => OK
Word variations: 59.4793964356 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.1428571429 20.5533526081 132% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.7978538159 48.84282405 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.476190476 120.699889404 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1428571429 20.5533526081 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.619047619048 0.644075263715 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 54.1604010025 45.7405998639 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.49090909091 1.45489161554 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341075860652 0.300154397459 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.124010174285 0.103427244359 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0851888243317 0.0752933317313 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.516026950302 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119404679054 0.151897553556 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152257834749 0.114077575197 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848701427505 0.0781384742642 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.466522571898 0.336927656856 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0337227250778 0.067059652881 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26884055593 0.210909579961 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069093459801 0.0618886996521 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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