All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
The author of this argument claims that all students in Centerville should take the driver’s education at High School. To justify the recommendation, the author cites the following facts. In the past two years, several accidents were happened in this area that teenagers were driver. In addition, some parents complain that they have not enough time and money for enrolling their teenager in the driving school, and it would be better high Centerville High School teach driving skills to their teenager. Scrutiny each of these facts, however, reveals that none of them lend credible supports to the recommendation.
First, a serious of problems with the argument arises from the scant statistical information. The author does not mention that the number of accidents in two past years ago. It is quite possible the percentage of accidents that teenagers were perpetrators. Furthermore, we must know about the number of parents who complained, because it might most of families have not any concerning about teenagers’ driving. In short, since the argument bases on the limited information, I cannot take the author’s conclusion seriously.
Second, the author claims that the best solution for decrease the number of accidents is that teenager take driving course in the high school. Admittedly, the use of school can be economical solution, while it entirely possible that most families still cannot pay its expenses. In addition, it may the school have not enough free time for allocate new course, because already curriculum full. In this way, the families can find superior alternative solution for this predicament. For example, parents can allocate their spare to teach driving to their teenagers instead of taking part in weekend party. Hence, the author must provide more information about the recommendation as well as consider other solutions.
In the third place, relies on the fact that in several accidents were happened around Centerville, teenagers blamed, the author infers that they have not enough driving skills. However, it is it is not necessarily the case. The author should consider other factors, which are more effective in these accidents. For instance, teenagers may are victims instead of perpetrators in most of accidents. Moreover, the author ignores that roads or weather condition can be the main cause of accidents. Without considering this possible scenario, the author can not justifiably conclude that teenagers have not sufficient driving skills.
In sum, the argument is flowed logically and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the author must provide more statistical information about the number of accidents and parents complained. In addition, it would be better to know that all effective causes in accidents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the families') or simply say ''most families''.
Suggestion: most of the families; most families
...arents who complained, because it might most of families have not any concerning about teenagers...
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Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'it is'.
Suggestion: it is
...ave not enough driving skills. However, it is it is not necessarily the case. The author sh...
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Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the accidents') or simply say ''most accidents''.
Suggestion: most of the accidents; most accidents
... are victims instead of perpetrators in most of accidents. Moreover, the author ignores that road...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in short', 'as well as', 'in the third place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251984126984 0.25644967241 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.125 0.15541462614 80% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0892857142857 0.0836205057962 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0674603174603 0.0520304965353 130% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0376984126984 0.0272364105082 138% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.136904761905 0.125424944231 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0257936507937 0.0416121511921 62% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88580602976 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0138888888889 0.026700313972 52% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.10119047619 0.113004496875 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0337301587302 0.0255425247493 132% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00595238095238 0.0127820249294 47% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2805.0 2731.13054187 103% => OK
No of words: 436.0 446.07635468 98% => OK
Chars per words: 6.43348623853 6.12365571057 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.433486238532 0.378187486979 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.330275229358 0.287650121315 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.240825688073 0.208842608468 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.160550458716 0.135150697306 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88580602976 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47247706422 0.469332199767 101% => OK
Word variations: 52.2455972277 52.1807786196 100% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 17.44 23.2022227129 75% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5614879347 57.7814097925 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.2 141.986410481 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.44 23.2022227129 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.84 0.724660767414 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 50.4675229358 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.80172413793 1.8405768891 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452884321327 0.441005458295 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0816464255043 0.135418324435 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0478474065897 0.0829849096947 58% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.508135215495 0.58762219726 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.099988586912 0.147661913831 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168243177314 0.193483328276 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959924114924 0.0970749176394 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.461104749535 0.42659136922 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0478627273851 0.0774707102158 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323462368897 0.312017818177 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802616595088 0.0698173142475 115% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.87684729064 204% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 14.0 5.36822660099 261% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 14.657635468 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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