"The city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony since the symphony's inception ten years ago. Last year the symphony hired an internationally known conductor, who has been able to attract high-profile guest musicians to perform with the symphony. Since then, private contributions to the symphony have doubled and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series has reached new highs. Now that the Grandview Symphony is an established success, it can raise ticket prices. Increased revenue from larger audiences and higher ticket prices will enable the symphony to succeed without funding from the city government."
The author of this arguments claims that the city government should not provide annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. To support the recommendation, the author cites the following facts. (1) A new director of Symphony attracts high-profile guest musicians to perform with the Symphony. (2) Private contributions to the symphony have doubled and more people come to the Symphony’s concert-in-the- park. (3) Symphony increases the cost of tickets, so its revenue will be increased. Scrutiny each of these facts, however, reveals that none of them lend credible supports to the recommendation.
First, relies on the fact that the tickets of Symphony concerts will raise, the author infers that its revenue will increase. However, it entirely possible that increasing the cost of tickets decrease the number of attendance at the symphony’s concert because people cannot afford its tickets. In this way, contradiction the author claim the symphony can not gain more revenue.
Second, a serious of problems with this argument arises from the scant statistical information. The author relies on the fact that private contributions to the symphony have doubled, so it never need city government’s funding’s. Although, private financial aids have increased, it is entirely possible it can not be enough. In addition, the author does not provide information that aids are permanents. In short, since the argument relies on the limited information, I cannot take the author’s final conclusion seriously.
In the third place, the author claims that symphony have increased because in the last concert increased significantly. However, the author must consider others factors, which cause many people came to the last concert. In it possible, the last concert had held in the summer, when people have spare time, so in the other seasons the can be change. In addition, the lack of recreations facilities forces people to go to concert, it might people find another alternative way for filling their time instead of going to concert in the future. Without considering this possible scenario, the author cannot justifiably conclude that symphonies fans have increased.
In sum, the argument is not credible and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the author must provide more statistical information about their fan, and private financial aids. In order to evaluate the recommendation, it would be better all possible factors, which increase the attendance last Symphony in-the-park-concert.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
The author of this arguments claims that the city governme...
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Message: Did you mean 'needs'?
Suggestion: needs
... the symphony have doubled, so it never need city government's funding's. ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...'s final conclusion seriously. In the third place, the author claims that...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'in addition', 'in short', 'in the third place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.26464208243 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.134490238612 0.15541462614 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0845986984816 0.0836205057962 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0455531453362 0.0520304965353 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0325379609544 0.0272364105082 119% => OK
Prepositions: 0.104121475054 0.125424944231 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0238611713666 0.0416121511921 57% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.17730302985 2.79052419416 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0260303687636 0.026700313972 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.114967462039 0.113004496875 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0303687635575 0.0255425247493 119% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00867678958785 0.0127820249294 68% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2542.0 2731.13054187 93% => OK
No of words: 388.0 446.07635468 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.55154639175 6.12365571057 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.44587628866 0.378187486979 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.345360824742 0.287650121315 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.255154639175 0.208842608468 122% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149484536082 0.135150697306 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17730302985 2.79052419416 114% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 207.018472906 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507731958763 0.469332199767 108% => OK
Word variations: 55.3517732741 52.1807786196 106% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 18.4761904762 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1729255292 57.7814097925 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.047619048 141.986410481 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4761904762 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.724660767414 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 53.0122729504 51.9672348444 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.84693877551 1.8405768891 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439504431723 0.441005458295 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113144742499 0.135418324435 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0670497748369 0.0829849096947 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.603546214226 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110040254787 0.147661913831 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.207173480945 0.193483328276 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904422141712 0.0970749176394 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.515238142251 0.42659136922 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0627457218901 0.0774707102158 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327868061717 0.312017818177 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0965961529072 0.0698173142475 138% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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