Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
“All a person needs is money to live a happy and prosperous life”.This sentence is excessively used to lure children into pursuing fields which in future could guarantee them a good job and career.But does every child views success as just acquiring money?Well,given the population and diversity that currently prevails in every corner of the world,this statement cannot be held as true for everyone.
Enforcing or encouraging students to just choose fields which could bring them good returns in the future is in a way neglecting the other areas of study,which a child maybe interested in taking up even as a hobby or something that interests him/her.For example:A child has been encouraged by his parents to take up engineering because that might help him get a good package and a secure future but he wanted to be guitarist,in this instance the child still might take up engineering but that was not something that he wanted to do in the first place. Success also means happiness and if the child does not enjoy what he does then even the prospect of a lucrative future would not make him successful,completely.
The main aim of educational institutions is all-round development of a child and not narrowing down the options he/she has while choosing the fields they want to go for.A child should be exposed to different fields so he must be ready to take on the challenges faced in everyday life in the outside world.Constricting them to a few fields undermines the very basis of the idea on which educational institutions are developed.A lot of ‘successful’ people are someone who were flexible with the subjects they took and who were willing to explore other fields too.Albert einstein did not pursue regular schooling rather he was home tutored and was he a very rich man?probably not.But he is still one of the most celebrated scientists of all time and that is success too.He learnt and pursued what he wanted to rather than taking up a field which could have made him more opulent.
Some might argue that encouraging children to choose fields of study( which will eventually result in good financial gains) on the big picture will help the economy of country to prosper.But at what cost?Also,not going for conventional fields does not mean that they cannot acquire wealth and help the economy.There have been numerous musicians and artists who have made large fortunes.Beyonce and Jay Z,both singers,have a combined fortune of over a billion dollars and have millions of fans all across the world.
To sum up,children are like clay,they can be shaped up in any way their elders want them too.To help them pursue what their heart wants,irrespective of what possibilities it holds in the future ensures long term happiness.If a child is passionate about pursuing something,he/she will eventually become successful in the field they undertook.It is important to support them at every step they take and to expose them to eclectic streams,leading to holistic development.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'to sum up', 'in the first place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216757741348 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.194899817851 0.157235817809 124% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0856102003643 0.0880659088768 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0546448087432 0.0497285424764 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0510018214936 0.0444667217837 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.100182149362 0.12292977631 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0455373406193 0.0406280797675 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.21663740827 2.79330140395 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0346083788707 0.030933414821 112% => OK
Particles: 0.0127504553734 0.0016655270985 766% => OK
Determiners: 0.0965391621129 0.0997080785238 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0273224043716 0.0249443105267 110% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0291438979964 0.0148568991511 196% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3006.0 2732.02544248 110% => OK
No of words: 494.0 452.878318584 109% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08502024291 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.331983805668 0.366273622748 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.240890688259 0.280924506359 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.186234817814 0.200843997647 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.145748987854 0.132149295362 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21663740827 2.79330140395 115% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 219.290929204 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528340080972 0.48968727796 108% => OK
Word variations: 63.3493136437 55.4138127331 114% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6194690265 29% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 82.3333333333 23.380412469 352% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 214.510618748 59.4972553346 361% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 501.0 141.124799967 355% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 82.3333333333 23.380412469 352% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 0.674092028746 321% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.21349557522 595% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 106.422402159 51.4728631049 207% => OK
Elegance: 1.20606060606 1.64882698954 73% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392085773705 0.391690518653 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.220741627541 0.123202303941 179% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0506934483046 0.077325440228 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.897487725994 0.547984918172 164% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.192245423747 0.149214159877 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.230155920824 0.161403998019 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700256344653 0.0892212321368 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.331447414337 0.385218514788 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0945736795266 0.0692045440612 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255352717496 0.275328986314 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372223441884 0.0653680567796 57% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.4325221239 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 13.5995575221 44% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.