one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?
Today, the science of medicine has enhanced among other sciences as a result of industrial revolution and post-modernism in a way that it seems to be reaching its peak of success. Thus we are witnessing life span to maximize, less people dying from diseases and children being saved from childhood illnesses. The contemporary world is offering public health care via insurance companies not to cost much. However these achievements come at a price. I personally believe that the answer to the question of whether these improvements are more advantageous or not, is yes, there are more beneficial than one could argue with. The first reason is that these advancements have resulted in saving many people from suffering and dying.
Many years ago, it was only natural to die from giving birth, getting sick or simply just being old, however modern science has grown so bright that cancer, AIDS and other fatal diseases can be either cured or at least dealt with. This is the first merit that advancements of science has brought us. No longer must we watch our family members, among many other people suffer and the penalty of death since the cure of them has been discovered by science.
Secondly, as life span expands more, healthier people tend to have better achievements in their lives. Once you pass a certain age, you get to master all your abilities and start to make contributions. Our society is proud to give crucial roles to more experienced individuals to play. This owes to the fact that a healthy mind results from a healthy body. If ever brilliant minds such as Steven Hawking for instance, had to lose their lives for the lack of knowledge, where would our science world be today? Therefore, in my opinion, advancements in health care is a cause as well as an effect of improvements in science and technology.
However, many claim that the recent enhancements of science in terms of curing people and expanding life expectancy has led our world to suffer from over population. Therefore, our planet is no longer able to provide us with food and water. Scientists reckon that if the growth in population continues to sharply increase, our planet will be destroyed out of pollution, extinction of animals and plants and devoid of supplies in no time. A large number of people are undergoing war, malnutrition and diseases despite all the medical achievements as a result of over population.
To summarize, l would like to think that our race has chosen the right goal but not the right approach in many cases. If only we could spread the knowledge and culture of controlling the reproduction of our generations, we would be able to claim that increasing life expectancy is all beneficial to us. This is only possible by seeking help from science itself.
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- one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ? 73
- one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ? 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ems to be reaching its peak of success. Thus we are witnessing life span to maximize...
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Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e are witnessing life span to maximize, less people dying from diseases and children...
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Line 1, column 406, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...a insurance companies not to cost much. However these achievements come at a price. I p...
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Line 1, column 490, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...I personally believe that the answer to the question of whether these improvements are more advantageou...
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'many claims'.
Suggestion: many claims
...ts in science and technology. However, many claim that the recent enhancements of science...
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Line 4, column 438, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...ants and devoid of supplies in no time. A large number of people are undergoing war, malnutrition...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'at least', 'for instance', 'such as', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'in many cases', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240310077519 0.247107183377 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.166666666667 0.155533422707 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0872093023256 0.0946595960268 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0562015503876 0.0501214627716 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0523255813953 0.0437548338989 120% => OK
Prepositions: 0.143410852713 0.122226691241 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0523255813953 0.0403226058552 130% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72805025502 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0387596899225 0.0326793684256 119% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0697674418605 0.0861772015684 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015503875969 0.021408717616 72% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00193798449612 0.011925033212 16% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2767.0 1933.35771543 143% => OK
No of words: 471.0 316.048096192 149% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87473460722 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.20517956788 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.329087048832 0.374742101984 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.229299363057 0.28420135186 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.16135881104 0.203846283523 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12101910828 0.137316102897 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72805025502 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 176.037074148 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556263269639 0.56093040696 99% => OK
Word variations: 67.6196679642 60.7387585426 111% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0891783567 137% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4090909091 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.75965681 49.517814964 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.772727273 127.492653851 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4090909091 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.772727272727 0.814263465372 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.99599198397 150% => OK
Readability: 44.3390272148 49.1944974215 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.58450704225 1.69124875643 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407126104805 0.332605444948 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0696615038753 0.102741220458 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0476454469846 0.0668466124924 71% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.477322605487 0.534860350844 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142670598668 0.148594505496 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146830916995 0.134430193775 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09444990582 0.0742795772207 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.300879056339 0.324371583561 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0784174870008 0.0638462369009 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281259263766 0.228012699653 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695845577849 0.058150111329 120% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.5751503006 311% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 10.4468937876 153% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.