In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
In today’s world, almost both developed and developing countries are facing financial problems. This becomes more serious in the latter ones. In these countries, usually, younger people like teenagers should work during their school ages. Even though some sociologists may think that this is a sound choice, but clearly, it will lead to some possible adverse consequences.
To begin with, this kind of working fills teenagers’ time, and so, deprives them of studying better. To put it in a different way, teenagers replace some parts of their study time with working, because, relevant officials have considered the conditions, and thereafter, have determined how much time should be spent by students at schools in order to have enough time to study, sleep, have fun, and so on. My older brother, John, who is a professor of Civil Engineering at Simon Fraser University now, as a case in point, is always telling me that his present-day success is due to his proper studies all through the time he was student in high school. He would have been prosperous as he is now, unless he had studied well. What’s more, tiredness is another factor that may diminish the quality of study. Because, almost all jobs, no doubt will make workers exhausted at the end. In general, it does not seem to be perfect for teenagers to work, as a wise person said, “The more you study, the better life you will have in future.”
In addition to declining study time, teenagers’ working may contribute to some mental damages. Workplaces are full of different kinds of people, thus, the possibility of encountering with rude persons would increase for teenagers. Consequently, it may lead to some unfavorable influences on their personality. Also, because of age difference, they may learn things which are not suitable for them. A research on people’s manner which was done by University of Western Ontario on June 24, 2001, as an illustration, shows that in Toronto, about 89 percent of people who used to have job when they were teenager are suffering from inappropriate behavior. Taking into account all these factors mentioned, if teenagers have job, they will presumably get mentally hurt.
In conclusion, although teenagers’ working may somewhat lead to a better financial status for a developing country, or at least, for their family, but it would definitely have serious effects on them. And as a sociology student, I, personally, believe that it is not a good idea for teenagers to have jobs.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'at least', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in general', 'kind of', 'no doubt', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221782178218 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.144554455446 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0732673267327 0.0866891130778 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0514851485149 0.046263068375 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0534653465347 0.0685040099705 78% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126732673267 0.118717715034 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0376237623762 0.0351676179071 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91498474376 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0277227722772 0.0309702414327 90% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0673267326733 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.029702970297 0.0209618222197 142% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0158415841584 0.0139019557991 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2543.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 413.0 408.028673835 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15738498789 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363196125908 0.338922669872 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285714285714 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203389830508 0.174417080927 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142857142857 0.112833075102 127% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91498474376 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607748184019 0.524397521467 116% => OK
Word variations: 75.8278998815 59.2087087015 128% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.9444444444 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.0477044787 48.84282405 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.277777778 120.699889404 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9444444444 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.833333333333 0.644075263715 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 51.5158730159 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.54761904762 1.45489161554 106% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223348604937 0.300154397459 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.077515573765 0.103427244359 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.067820107296 0.0752933317313 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.438768129704 0.497263757937 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141603775827 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790629993865 0.114077575197 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443040873244 0.0781384742642 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.276080452843 0.336927656856 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0478285007376 0.067059652881 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156005577618 0.210909579961 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291099791153 0.0618886996521 47% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.4623655914 284% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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