do you agree or disagree?Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed.

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do you agree or disagree?Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed.

The question is whether Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed or not. Since advertising can play a crucial role in children's life an in spread spectrum, hence the parents have to evaluate its cons and pros accurately. On the one hand, advertising can debilitate discernment ability in children; on the other one it can increase this ability in them. In the existence these points, I believe that advertising will have negative impacts in long term. My arguments and reasons are listed below that will strengthen my point of view:
To begin with, it is controvertibly axiomatic that the main goal of advertising is deception of people. Commercial products which are advertised in TV do not have high quality and advertisers try to demonstrate the aspects which are not true. With regard to this, the advertisers will benefit from this perspective; however nobody could overlook the fact that advertisers weaken children's diagnostic ability. For instance, when I was a kid, I observed an advertising about the milk which a child who was drinking it then he was growing fast. After watching it, I bought a brand from that milk. It may seem ridiculous now, however I expected to grow fast and when it did not happened, I let down. It can be said because of existence of this type of advertising, children will conflict with themselves about relying on others or not.
The second reason why I advocate this point of view: lies in the fact that children will prefer to live in fantasy instead of reality. The nature of children spontaneously tends to create imaginative stories. Inasmuch the huge part of children's life are spent in front of TV; consequently continuous observations the advertising can avoid them from real life .The exaggeration is one of the noticeable bases of advertising and it can have destructive impacts. To elucidate, take a kid who has observed the advertising about a lion that has eaten the cereal and then it is able to fly in the sky. This kid after eating that cereal will try to fly from roof of his house and the conclusion is obvious.
Having discussed this issue from the point of view, I'm going to empower it by the following discussion. As I mentioned before, children between two to five ages do not have high power of recognition, hence happy colors and the appealing characters can attract them. It can lead them to select detrimental products during buying.
By taking all above-mentioned arguments into the consideration, the following conclusion could be drawn about this issue. Television advertising can affect on children's mind and their decisions. Since advertisers do not usually pay attention to the rules of advertising and they abuse from children's trust, subsequently there is no worth watching advertising by children.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 675, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'happen'
Suggestion: happen
...pected to grow fast and when it did not happened, I let down. It can be said because of ...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...dvertising can avoid them from real life .The exaggeration is one of the noticeabl...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ertising can avoid them from real life .The exaggeration is one of the noticeable b...
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Line 4, column 53, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...ssed this issue from the point of view, Im going to empower it by the following di...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
... this issue. Television advertising can affect on childrens mind and their decisions. Sin...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'for instance', 'to begin with', 'with regard to']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228962818004 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.172211350294 0.158761421928 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0606653620352 0.0866891130778 70% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0469667318982 0.046263068375 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0606653620352 0.0685040099705 89% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12915851272 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0371819960861 0.0351676179071 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92994502608 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.027397260274 0.0309702414327 88% => OK
Particles: 0.00195694716243 0.00188951952338 104% => OK
Determiners: 0.0939334637965 0.0887237588012 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0371819960861 0.0209618222197 177% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0176125244618 0.0139019557991 127% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2806.0 2387.08602151 118% => OK
No of words: 467.0 408.028673835 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00856531049 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323340471092 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269807280514 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21199143469 0.174417080927 122% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154175588865 0.112833075102 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92994502608 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531049250535 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 62.7122335599 59.2087087015 106% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.2272727273 20.5533526081 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4529652071 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.545454545 120.699889404 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2272727273 20.5533526081 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 48.2080007787 45.7405998639 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.41258741259 1.45489161554 97% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143395831715 0.300154397459 48% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.094330958239 0.103427244359 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0601261053702 0.0752933317313 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.487185384843 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.121146214595 0.151897553556 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660825363962 0.114077575197 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121062623497 0.0781384742642 155% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.357234702305 0.336927656856 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0785425051129 0.067059652881 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105898636356 0.210909579961 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625058004893 0.0618886996521 101% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 2.4623655914 366% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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in long term.
in a long term.

is deception of people
is the deception of people

when it did not happened,
when it did not happen,

from real life
from a real life
from the real life

Sentence: My arguments and reasons are listed below that will strengthen my point of view: To begin with, it is controvertibly axiomatic that the main goal of advertising is deception of people.
Error: controvertibly Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2 //you have issues on articles

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Goo Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 468 350
No. of Characters: 2295 1500
No. of Different Words: 241 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.651 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.904 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.9 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.405 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.409 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.301 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5