do you agree or disagree? young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities .
The question is whether young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities or not. Everyone in regard to his private viewpoints can maintain a specific direction in related with this issue, however in my vantage point; this sentence has an exaggeration view toward youth. I refute it and my arguments are listed below that will strengthen my point of view:
To begin with, take look to different aspect from this issue. It goes without saying that the biggest dream young people are fame. The tendency of being famous has caused youth to try for obtaining new things in any ground. The competition for the newest inventions or gaining the championship in different sports has created an excitement surge among young population. It is valid that young people endeavor to get benefit for their own life, however their efforts spontaneously will affect on quality of community.
The second reason why I disagree with this point of view lies in the fact that if youth are apathetic toward their society, the philosophy of the existence of the universities will be meaningless. Nobody could overlook that the universities play a crucial role in developing a society. It is axiomatic that when students study in different fields, will attract to labor market after the graduation. This is another noticeable support that young generation is able to optimize the different sections of community.
Having discussed this issue from this point of view, I tend to empower my claim by the following discussion. Since all youth do not enter to the university, the rest of them will try to find a work in consideration to his abilities. It can be said that the gears of industry will be turned by them. A country with being up-dated in industry major is a serious menace for other communities.
By taking all above mentioned arguments into the consideration, the following conclusion could be drawn about this issue. Young people whether intentionally or unintentionally are helping to society. Their effort will set their country in peak of progress.
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you highlight that we must write our writing in 5 paragraph, right? I agree with this rule, however Magoosh in its structure expresses that 2 reason is enough ( I mean 4 paragaraph). Will lose our grade If we write a writing with 4 paragraph or not?
Not really to lose grades
Not really to lose grades with four paragraphs. Users still can get higher marks with four paragraphs.
But for most users, if they are asked to develop only four paragraphs, most likely they are going to put a big example in the second paragraph and another big example in the third paragraph. and these big examples are most likely the personal experience by themselves, which is likely to get a lower mark.
so why five paragraphs?
1. Users will have to put more content. in writing exams, more content means high marks.
2. Uses will have to put one more idea. So they are not going to panic in actual exams if they only have two ideas in exam time.
3. With one more idea, users will have to use more different words. This is another big advantage to reach higher marks.
4. It also is going to put short examples but more general. and this is a good one for arguments.
5. Users are going to change the wring styles with more sentence varieties with five paragraphs since it is boring to write the same structure for three paragraphs in the essay body.
6. ......
There are more advantages, to get higher marks and for future academic careers, we highly recommend five paragraphs.
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Essay evaluation report
take look to different aspect from this issue.
take a look to different aspects from this issue.
the biggest dream young people are fame
the biggest dream young people want is fame
has caused youth to try
has caused youths to try
when students study in different fields, will attract to labor market after the graduation.
when students study in different fields, they will attract to labor market after the graduation.
Since all youth do not enter
Since all youths do not enter
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
The essay is not exactly right on the topic. Here 'helping their communities' means some voluntary jobs or activities.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? in 30
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1688 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.936 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.75 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.249 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.211 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.276 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...owever their efforts spontaneously will affect on quality of community. The second rea...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'in regard to', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240540540541 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.164864864865 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0891891891892 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.027027027027 0.046263068375 58% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0594594594595 0.0685040099705 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.151351351351 0.118717715034 127% => OK
Participles: 0.0459459459459 0.0351676179071 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82319897402 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0351351351351 0.0309702414327 113% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.110810810811 0.0887237588012 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0297297297297 0.0209618222197 142% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00540540540541 0.0139019557991 39% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2071.0 2387.08602151 87% => OK
No of words: 342.0 408.028673835 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.05555555556 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356725146199 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263157894737 0.251872472559 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.187134502924 0.174417080927 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131578947368 0.112833075102 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82319897402 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561403508772 0.524397521467 107% => OK
Word variations: 61.8427996191 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2972857885 48.84282405 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.055555556 120.699889404 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.644075263715 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 45.3157894737 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.74193548387 1.45489161554 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198297733947 0.300154397459 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0881263339098 0.103427244359 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0670503522691 0.0752933317313 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.483445251907 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.109351713903 0.151897553556 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900843281178 0.114077575197 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148448532948 0.0781384742642 190% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.349732784882 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0671200723294 0.067059652881 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140873130748 0.210909579961 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781229671287 0.0618886996521 126% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.