TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people tend to believe that in order to succeed in a future job, a person ought to have the ability to relate well to people. At the same time, the second group claims that studying hard in school is more crucial for achieving success than the ability to quickly build up decent relationships with people. Although I could understand the idea behind the first stance, I am prone to buttress the second one. The reasons on which my prospect is based will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, studying hard during school years demonstrates that a person has a character. Today's school program is quite challenging and many pupils have real troubles to understand the taught material in order to get decent marks. A person who studied hard in school who did not give up and continue working and learning will demonstrate those valuable traits at work as well. By contrast, a person who was spineless during school years will hardly develop a strong character which is required for being successful in the contemporary job market.
Secondly, school years build up a foundation on which a person constructs his future career. In fact, we learn a lot of essential information about the world and the reality in school and without having this knowledge we may struggle to get education and a nice, well-paid job. For instance, it is needless to say that in order to get a decent job a person ought to get a professional diploma. Otherwise, the person will have to seek a blue collar job which is not associated with success. So, to graduate from college or university a student has to pass through a bunch of exams, learn a plethora of subjects and it is literally impossible without thoughtfully knowing information from a school program.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may allow a person to state that the ability to relate nicely to people is a key to success. Chiefly, the person may aver that a worker with this characteristic will be able to create a close bond with management and therefore he will be quickly promoted. However, I still affirm that hard studying in school is more important, mostly because senior managers are professionals who comprehend that being a nice guy does not substitute for being a professional. In fact, being seen as a talkative guy may backfire in case the employer decides that it distracts other employees who work side by side with the communicative guy. Withal a hard working person who forged his character during school years will be promoted because efficiency and professional knowledge are keys to professional success.
To wrap up, working hard during school education develops desirable personal traits and builds up a foundation for future education and thus it is more beneficial for a future job than having the ability to relate well to people because we are paid for fulfilling our duties well and studying hard contributes to it greatly.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 494 while No. of Different Words: 229 //some contents may get duplicated
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 494 350
No. of Characters: 2372 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.714 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.802 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.709 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.279 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as to, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2426.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91093117409 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75600875508 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471659919028 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.454771935 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.684210526 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238259904709 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827643025255 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658397785375 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164085521748 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061685003998 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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