tpo 40
The reading states that the condition on the mars is not suitable for human presence on it for a long time and provid three reason to support its claim. However, the lecture states that although standing human permanent presence on mars is challenging issue, but it is impossible.
First, the passage says that the pressure on the earth is 90 times extremer than the earth' pressure since all construction would be crushed. On the cotrary, the professor suggest that the astronoments can establish a sation which flow on the atomosphere like bloon, because it the high heght the pressure is lowe than the surafce. So, they can flow on the 50 km height which pressure is normal and equal to earth surafce since it is not dangerous for human and equipment and does not crush them.
Second, the reading passage claims that there is not any source of water and oxygen on the mars and they must be provided form the earth. In constrast, the lecture declare this solution that the atomosphere of mars is full of chemical component such as carbon dixide and sulfuric acid. Humans can produce the water and oxygen by this two chemical materials in their station. So, they do not need to bring water in their trip to the mars.
Third, the reading asserts that the surafce of marth is converd by a thick clouds which do not let the light recieve on the surface of mars as a result humans can not produce the require electricity out of sunlight. On the other hand, the lecture states that it is true that atomosphere of the mars is coverd by a clouds, but this cloud is not thick in order to prevent the light to through from them. In fact, the considerable amount of light pass from these clouds and reach to the surfaace. Also, the station can use from the reflected and passed light for producing an enough amount of electiricy.
- Tpo 46. The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. 68
- young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping to their communities 70
- Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. 60
- tpo 23 73
- It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. 65
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stronoments can establish a sation which flow on the atomosphere like bloon, beca...
^^
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...mars as a result humans can not produce the require electricity out of sunlight. On the oth...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a cloud' or simply 'clouds'?
Suggestion: a cloud; clouds
...at atomosphere of the mars is coverd by a clouds, but this cloud is not thick in order t...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, so, third, in fact, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 326.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5981595092 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38073371741 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484662576687 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3880356012 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.307692308 110.228320801 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284853654848 0.272083759551 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988316844753 0.0996497079465 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437538785138 0.0662205650399 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15320671078 0.162205337803 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405175182128 0.0443174109184 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 53.8541721854 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.2367328918 79% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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