Some young children participate in a wide range of extra-curricular activities such as music, sports, or photography. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and details to support your response.
Nowadays, participating in extra-curricular is becoming increasingly popular. For some children, taking extra-curricular class brings them a lot of happiness. However, there are both pros and cons to decide to join it. In this essay, I will discuss why extra-curricular is so popular and some of the dark sides to be overcome.
Let’s begin by looking at the advantages of enrolling extra-curricular classes. One of the main positives of entering this kind of activities is that it offers children an opportunity to shape and direct their passions. At school, teachers always ask students focus on academic curriculum and forget that some of them can perform better at music, art or sports rather than academic learning. In contrast, through extra-curricular activities, students can explore their interests while they are still in school. Take “The voice kids” for example. This contest help teens to test out if they have potential talent for music. Thanks to the show, many beautiful voices have been found out and the owners are given chances to follow and develop their passion. Secondly, extra-curricular activities is a secret for the university life. Colleges and universities are looking for well-rounded children. While high grades serve as a testament for academic ability, it doesn’t indicate the person the applicant is. Mere mention of extra-curricular activities can help students to increase the odds of admission. Obviously, enrolling in extra-curricular activities is not only a perfect platform for passion pursuit but the key to succeed in university application of the young as well.
Turning to the other side of the argument, the ability to distinguish between interests and priorities is a major problem. Although out-of-school activities is are just addition to the regular schooling days, some students can’t gauget whether extra-curricular activities or schoolwork is more important. Clearly, teens find it hard to deny the urge to do something they love compared to other priorities. Consciously or unconsciously, they deny the academic priorities to follow passion, which can have a negative affect on their academic performance. Another issue is extra expense along with those activities. No matter what kind of activtities teens choose, expense is required. If a child learns to play music, her parents will have to spend a lot of money to rent or buy instruments and find a good teacher. Similarly, skating activity requires a good quality skaters, or it may be cost for shoes and uniform for dancing. Thesedays the cost of living is sharply increasing, which asks many parents to do extra work to provide for extra-curricular activities of their babies.
All things considered, there are clearly both positives and negatives to enroll extra-curricular activities. While it is known as a great way to explore passions and apply to university, for many people there are many differences to face with. Personally, I believe the benefits in term of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, well, while, for example, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2587.0 1615.20841683 160% => OK
No of words: 477.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42348008386 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28132494969 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 176.041082164 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570230607966 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 816.3 506.74238477 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0721442886 174% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7782239253 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3928571429 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0357142857 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10714285714 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193505275168 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555329794999 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530457992097 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124624274277 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644587298429 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 78.4519038076 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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